User:Aleclo1/Arabian sand gazelle/Ruby stan Peer Review

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(aleclo1)


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 * Arabian sand gazelle

Evaluate the drafted changes
They did very well at talking about the topic straight away and putting the information that was relevant to the topics. I was impressed with the concise wording structure of the paragraphs. I think closings of the paragraphs could be better. Also, better explanations of what exactly is being helped. These would be improvements because the article would be clearer. In the first paragraph I would say include how exactly it works when the gazelles are responding to changes. The second one I though was well thought out and clear. Yes both paragraphs were very well organized. There could definitely be longer sections in this article. I think their addition is going to add some depth to the article, since this stuff is not really talked about. Everything was neutral.