User:Aleman1993/sandbox

In Aids Article
I added an important statistic that demonstrates how our health care system is improving because the amount of new HIV cases decreased compared to 2015. I also added the citation of the source. Aleman1993 (talk) 01:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

In Health Article
The statement, "For example, obesity is a very large problem in the United States that contributes to bad mental health and causes stress in a lot of people's lives." clearly came from an outside source. Therefore I added the citation and reference to Advances in Human Factors, Business Management, Training and Education | SpringerLink. As a result, I erased the "citation needed" link.Aleman1993 (talk) 01:28, 3 October 2017 (UTC)

I evaluated Miasmas Theory Article
Everything within the article is directly related to the miasmas theory. I found it surprising when the article mentions that, “The terrifying miasma diseases in the southern regions of China made it the primary location for relegating officials and sending criminals to exile since the Qin-Han Dynasty”. It seems like these miasmas served as the border control. Even though it would not be humane, it seems like we could use these miasmas today as border control and we would not have to spend thousands of dollars in additional security. Though this theory proved to be wrong, we should learn from it by wearing nose masks when we enter unsanitary conditions.

This article accurately informed me about the miasmas theory. It does reveal some bias because it tends to be based on our genetic changes.

The author failed to represent the Greek background which has a lot of medical significance.

Yes, the links to the neutral sources work fine. The sources clearly address the claims made in the article. However, there is a link to an encyclopedia from Paris that does not work.

The author uses credible sources because they are very recent and they come from accredited universities or health journals. Yet, www.merriam-webster.com is not a reliable source.

The author does forget to add a citation on one occasion. Also, in the sections about China he talks about several dynasties that several people may not be familiar with. Therefore, I would suggest adding some links that lead to other articles.

There are numerous comments on the talk page that critique the separate sections on China. Other user also noticed a couple of eccentricities, and relations made towards our current epigenetics.

This article is rated as C-class, and it is a WikiProject of medicine, science, history, sanitation, and European history.

We have not directly addressed the miasmas theory, but it reminds me of the ecological theory of disease. Even if bad air was a factor that caused diseases; it would be nearly impossible for a doctor to prevent it because doctors cannot improve the environment on their own.

In Jerome Caja article
I plan to talk about how he has changed his artistic practices numerous times. The word "symptoms" should also have a link because during this period there was a lot of controversy over the meaning of symptoms. I plan to add information about the personality that he mimics in his art. Furthermore, I would like to add more about the community he takes place in. Aleman1993 (talk) 20:55, 18 October 2017 (UTC)

Using these references:

https://www.visualaids.org/gallery/detail/396

Katz, J. D., Hushka, R., Arning, B., Castiglia, C., Reed, C., Helfand, G., Hernandez, R., ... Bronx Museum of the Arts,. (2015). Art AIDS America.

http://www.glbtqarchive.com/arts/caja_jerome_A.pdf

In Oakland, California article
This article does not contain any information about Chinatown, so plan to add information about how it developed. The Chinese also introduced the bay area(Oakland) to plague, so I plan to describe when plague was first diagnosed in the bay area and how many lives the epidemic of plague claimed in Oakland. It is also important to mention how the officials in Oakland responded to the epidemic. Aside from the plague I noticed that several major hospitals are mentioned in the article, therefore I believe that it is important to add more information about the Highland hospital into the healthcare section.Aleman1993 (talk) 20:36, 8 November 2017 (UTC)

I plan to use these references:

https://doi.org/10.4269/ajtmh.2010.09-0775

https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1362744/pdf/amjphealth00203-0031.pdf

http://ajph.aphapublications.org/doi/pdf/10.2105/AJPH.25.3.319

Ma, L. E. A. (2011). Hometown Chinatown: The history of Oakland's Chinese community.

http://www.eastbaytimes.com/2017/08/10/highland-hospital-named-east-bays-only-level-1-adult-trauma-center/

http://www.nytimes.com/2012/09/26/movies/the-waiting-room-about-highland-hospital-by-peter-nicks.html

Chang, I. (2004). The Chinese in America: A narrative history. New York, N.Y., U.S.A: Penguin Books.

Improving an Existing Article
Notes for Improvement
 * Begin by briefly describing the history of Chinatown( why/when the Chinese began to arrive, how they were treated, and when plague was first identified in the bay area as a result of the Chinese merchants)


 * Write a paragraph(sub-section) on plague ( when the epidemic occurred in Oakland, how many lives were claimed by plague, how officials in Oakland responded to plague)
 * Besides the plague, I'll add important facts that should be known about Highland Hospital onto the health care section.Aleman1993 (talk) 03:45, 10 November 2017 (UTC)
 * I'll also fix a few of the claims that are missing citations.

New History of Chinatown Subsection
During the 1850’s just as Gold was discovered in California; Oakland started growing and developing because land was becoming too expensive in San Francisco. Since the Chinese were struggling financially in China, they migrated to Oakland in an effort to provide for their families in China. However, the Chinese struggled to settle because their living quarters got burned down on several occasions. The Chinese also experienced discrimination by the white community. The majority of these migrants lived in unhealthy conditions in China and they often has diseases, so Plague managed to spread into San Francisco even though the Chinese were thoroughly inspected for diseases upon their arrival to San Francisco.

New Plague Sub-section( in 1900-1950's section between 1st paragraph about SF earthquake and general motors)
Plague is a vector-borne disease caused by Yersinia pestis that can be fatal to humans if they are bitten by vectors infected with Plague. In 1899, the Plague was first noticed in San Francisco and it is believed to have arrived through merchant ships from Hong Kong. Initially, the disease killed more than 100 people in San Francisco within a 4 year span. The disease then spread eastwards, Since vectors are affected by climate factors such as precipitation and temperature. This resulted in a small epidemic of Pneumonic Plague in Oakland, which killed a dozen people in 1919. However, the officials in Oakland acted quickly by issuing death certificates to monitor the spread of the Plague. Additionally, The State Board of Health along with Oakland advised the Physicians to promptly report any cases of infected patients.

Alameda County Medical Center is operated by the county and provides medical services to county residents, including the medically indigent who do not have health insurance. The 14 acre main campus, Highland Hospital in East Oakland, is a surgical and general hospital which serves as the trauma center for the northern area of the East Bay.The hospital in 2017 became the only Level 1 adult trauma center in the East Bay, as it has been a Level 2 adult trauma center. The Hospital’s crowded emergency room has also been featured in the documentary waiting room.

Polish your work:
To polish my work I began by correcting the mistakes that Ian (Wiki Ed) noticed. I fixed misused apostrophes, capitalized proper nouns ,rearranged the order to describe the bigger issues(discrimination) first then the specific issues(fires). I also italicized the bacteria and continued to expand my work on plague by adding that the amount Oakland is given to fight Plague is not enough. Additionally, I have renamed the title of the Plague section to "Plague" because it was titled "bubonic plague", but the epidemic in Oakland was Pneumonic plague. Additionally, I erased several sentences that described the disease in too much detail for this article. This is also an article on Oakland and there was too much information about the plague in San Francisco. Some claims were even redundant, so those were erased as well.Aleman1993 (talk) 23:51, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

Continue Improving your Article
I have continued improving my work by adding links from my Oakland article to wars that China engaged in, to the bacteria from Plague, to Henry Gage, and to the United States Public Health Service. I have also added links to my Oakland, California article from the Chinatown, Oakland article and from the Pneumonic plague article. I was also planning on adding an image of the Plague in Oakland, but I did not find any images of this epidemic in Oakland, so I added an image of Alta Bates medical Center. I selected this because the majority of the sections have an image and the healthcare section seemed underrepresented because there was no images.Aleman1993 (talk) 05:46, 29 November 2017 (UTC)

New History of Chinatown Subsection
During the 1850s just as Gold was discovered in California; Oakland started growing and developing because land was becoming too expensive in San Francisco. The Chinese were struggling financially, as a result of the First Opium War, Second Opium War, and the Taiping Rebellion, so they migrated to Oakland in an effort to provide for their families in China. However, the Chinese struggled to settle because they were discriminated by the white community and their living quarters got burned down on several occasions. The majority of the Chinese migrants lived in unhealthy conditions in China and they often had diseases, so Plague spread into San Francisco even though the Chinese were thoroughly inspected for diseases upon their arrival to San Francisco.

New Plague Sub-section( in 1900-1950's section between 1st paragraph about SF earthquake and general motors)
Oakland was one of the major cities in California that was impacted by the plague epidemic.Plague is a vector-borne disease caused by Yersinia pestis that can be fatal to humans if they are bitten by vectors infected with plague. In 1899, the Plague was first noticed in San Francisco and it is believed to have arrived through merchant ships from Hong Kong. Initially, the disease killed more than 100 people in San Francisco within a 4 year span. The business community did not agree with the quarantines in place because they feared that it would scare people away and it would jeopardize the businesses. Even governor Gage rejected the fact that Plague was present in California. Whereas, Kelly Foster the secretary from Oakland aligned legislation and directly answered calls to give suggestions for diagnosing and controlling Plague. The disease then spread eastwards to Oakland, since vectors are affected by climate factors such as precipitation and temperature. Quarantine measures were set in place at the Oakland ports requiring the authorities at the port to inspect the arriving vessels for the presence of infected rats. Hunters were sent to poison the affected areas in Oakland and shoot the squirrels, but the eradication work was limited in its range because the State Board of Health and the United States Public Health Service were only allotted about $60,000 a year to eradicate the disease. The State Board of Health along with Oakland also advised the Physicians to promptly report any cases of infected patients. Yet, in 1919 it still resulted in a small epidemic of Pneumonic plague which killed a dozen people in Oakland. However, the officials in Oakland acted quickly by issuing death certificates to monitor the spread of the Plague.

Healthcare Subsection aside from Plague
Alameda County Medical Center is operated by the county and provides medical services to county residents, including the medically indigent who do not have health insurance. The 14 acre main campus, Highland Hospital in East Oakland, is a surgical and general hospital which serves as the trauma center for the northern area of the East Bay.The hospital in 2017 became the only Level 1 adult trauma center in the East Bay, as it has been a Level 2 adult trauma center. The Hospital’s crowded emergency room has also been featured in the documentary waiting room.