User:Aleong24/Human skeletal changes due to bipedalism/Eric Heldt Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Aleong24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aleong24/Human_skeletal_changes_due_to_bipedalism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Human skeletal changes due to bipedalism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall I think what you have written is very good. The information you have added seems very relevant and useful to people who would be interested in the topic. The written stuff is well organized and fits in well with the perviously written material. It is well written but I did find 2 grammatical errors which I have put below in bold. Other than that you have a lot of sources which is good. I think possibly you could make Savannah hypothesis into a wiki link in order for people who want to find more info on that easily can. Overall with the material you have added the article seems more complete. The main strength of what you have added is the additional details on the topics.

is normal for *an* upright gait

stiffening of the arch would be *required* of an upward gait

Response -Alisha
Hi Eric,

Thank you for your feedback! I will correct the errors that you have flagged. I will also include hyperlinks when needed in the article, for example, the savannah hypothesis.