User:Aletariel/Taung Child/Gissele Oro Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Aletariel


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 * Taung Child

Initial criticism of Dart's claims[edit]
Scientists were initially reluctant to accept that the Taung Child and the new genus Australopithecus were ancestral to modern humans. In the issue of Nature immediately following the one in which Dart's paper was published, several authorities in British paleoanthropology criticized Dart's conclusion. Three of the four scholars were members of the Piltdown Man committee: Sir Arthur Keith, Grafton Elliot Smith, and Sir Arthur Smith Woodward. They were much more skeptical about this fossil's place in evolutionary history, and believed it deserved to be categorized as a chimp or gorilla rather than a human ancestor. The Taung child's discovery 2000 miles South of forested habitats was indicative of an evolutionary path taken on African grasslands rather than in Asia or Europe, as the leading researchers thought at the time. However, Dart still had the hesitant support of W.H.L. Duckworth, but he still asked for more information on the brain to support this claim.

Evaluate the drafted changes
From what I see in the draft the bold sentence "The Taung child's discovery 2000 miles South of forested habitats was indicative of an evolutionary path taken on African grasslands rather than in Asia or Europe, as the leading researchers thought at the time." seems to be the edit in question by the user.

By including the new information, it gave a clarification as to why the there is a debate on the topic. Although I would suggest to review the sentence and maybe divide it into two so that it can flow a bit better.

For example: At the time, Taung child's discovery was thought to be deprived from Asian or European however is now believed to be from African grasslands. Being discovered 2000 miles South of forested habitats gives a clear indication of African evolutionary path.

This is how I would personally structure the sentence, however please review and make adequate changes as you see fit.

Overall, the draft gave a great addition to the main intention of the section.