User:Alex Atwood7/sandbox

Article Selection

Human memory process Link: Human memory process

Right off the bat, I can confirm that everything is spelled correctly, which in the case of this article, it's not. Secondly, the very first sentence is very confusing for someone to comprehend, so I will definitely look at alternatives for that. It seems as though the thoughts are very scrambled in this article, there is no flow. There is also only once source for the entire article, which can or cannot be an issue.

Article Selection

Liquid X Link: Liquid X

This energy drink article has a official Wikipedia "This article has multiple issues" banner, so I would say there are improvements to be made. First, I can see if the products is still being made, list of flavors, etc. The links don't work either, so I'll have to fix that.

Article Selection

Haarlem Oil Link: Haarlem oil

This article just lacks information. The entire article is six sentences, so with some research, I think I could drastically improve it.

Article Evaluation

Pro Football Hall of Fame

Talk:Pro Football Hall of Fame


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?

- This article displays a ton of biased information that quite honestly, is unprofessional. One example of this is when the author says “It TICKS ME OFF when people say they should include Canadian and Arena football players when they are different sports”. Once again this is unprofessional and doesn't deserve to be a legitimate article.


 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?

- The Articles sources only include information from 2012 and earlier, so yes there is a ton of outdated information.There is 7 years of people being added to the NFL Hall of Fame that aren't in this article so personally that's where I would start with this article, regarding updating information.


 * What else could be improved?

- Honestly I would scrap the entire article and start  from scratch. The information in this article is very biased and some of it is irrelevant to the NFL Hall of Fame in general. It's almost as the author is taking his anger out on a Wikipedia page, rather than providing accurate information for all of us to read.


 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?

- The article is not neutral at all. It's almost as the author is displaying his own personal opinion in the article. An example of this would be, “I'll put this on my personal "to do" list, but it will likely be a while before I get to it”. Once again, uncalled for, and not professional.


 * Are there viewpoints that are over-represented, or underrepresented?

-This article talks a lot (too much) about the Chicago Bears, so that would be an example of over-represented. I can’t find an example of underrepresented, so I would say this article is okay on that aspect.


 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?

- Technically the one source link does work, the problem is there is only one source. The link is about players in the NFL Hall of fame, as well as All-star games, which most likely include Hall of fame candidates.


 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?

No, each fact is not referenced with an appropriate or reliable source. Most of the information is biased, however, the author of the article doesn't list it as being biased.


 * Talk page Information

- Most of the information on the talk page is stuff I'm personally thinking as well as things I have wrote above regarding the article. So yes, I think the talk page is relevant to the article and helping it succeed.

Article Draft

A big thing with haarlem oil is it's very beneficial to horses, so that's what I'm going to talk about for my Wiki article selection.

Benefits of haarlem oil for competition horses.

- Greatly improves the urinary system and removes most toxin's in the horses system.

- Haarlem oil guarantee's against infections, such as respiratory, urinary, biliary, and intestinal.

- Naturally stimulates the horses own hormone secretions without side effects.

- Helps assist the rapid recovery process after the horse competes.

- Fights any and all arthritic actions.

******* Haarlem oil (Dutch: haarlemmerolie), also called medicamentum gratia probatum, is a dietary supplement. The potion is a mixture of sulfur, herbs and terebinth oil. It is produced in Haarlem, Netherlands.

It was invented in 1696 by Claes Tilly and was marketed as a cure for many ailments.[1][2]

The word haarlemmerolie (with a lowercase 'h') is now used in Dutch to indicate a fix for all problems. For example: "lowering taxes will be like haarlemmerolie for the economy". This is also used sarcastically.[citation needed]

Benefits to race horses -

- Greatly improves the urinary system and removes most toxin's in the horses system.

- Haarlem oil guarantee's against infections, such as respiratory, urinary, biliary, and intestinal.

- Naturally stimulates the horses own hormone secretions without side effects.

- Helps assist the rapid recovery process after the horse competes.

- Fights any and all arthritic actions.

References[edit]

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External links[edit]

 * http://www.haarlemmerolie.nl/
 * Dietary Supplements