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Newtonian telescope

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Henry Salt Notes (Alex Stansbery)
Early Life

Youngest of 8 children

Parents : Thomas Salt and Alice née Butt

Went to school in Lichfield, Market Bosworth, and Birmingham (taught by his brother John Butt Salt)

First studied portrait painting from John Glover (water colorist)

Worked with guys in London from 1797

His skills didn't net success.

The Adventure Begins

Went on first tour in JUNE of 1802

While in Ethiopia, Salt acquired the respect of the ras of Tigré

Went back to England through Egypt in 1806 and while he was there he met the pasha Mehmet Ali

The Return to Ethiopia

Originally supposed to meet the king of Gondar instead of the ras of Tigré bc of bad political times in the country

Took observations on geography, Ethiopian customs, as well as plants and animals.

Brought back a completely unknown species of of dik-dik(link to wikipedia page) in 1811

Became fellow of the Royal Society and the Linnean Society

Became one of a select few of honorary members of the African Association in 1812

Published A Voyage to Abyssinia in 1814 Alex C Stansbery (talk) 16:49, 9 March 2018 (UTC)

Draft

Early Life

Henry Salt was born in Lichfield on June 14, 1780 to parents Thomas Salt and Alice née Butt. He was the youngest of 8 kids and went to school in Lichfield, Market Bosworth, and finally in Birmingham under the teachings of his brother John Butt Salt. During his early life he took an interest in portrait painting. While in Lichfield he studied under a water color artist named John Glover and in 1979, he traveled to London where he studied first under Joseph Farington and then later under John Hoppner. He became quite good at getting the likenesses of people in his paintings, but unfortunately he was unable to get any real acclaim with his work so he eventually gave it up.

Early Travels

After his time as as a portrait painter, Henry Salt found himself in the service of Viscount Valentia as his secretary and draughtsman. They went on an eastern tour in June of 1802 which took them through India, Ceylon, and the Red Sea. In 1805, Valentia sent Salt on a journey into Abyssinia (now Ethiopia) to meet with the ras of Tigré. While visiting there, Salt gained the respect of the ras of Tigré. In 1806 he departed from Ethiopia back to England. His journey home took him through Egypt where he met the pasha Mehmet Ali.

In 1809, the British government hired Salt to go back Abyssinia and deliver presents to it's king as well as learn more about it's land and people. Upon arrival, he was unable to meet with the king due to unrest in the country so instead he went to stay with his friend the ras of Tigré. While there he took several observations about the geography of the land, the customs of it's peoples and of the plants and animals that lived there. Salt came back to England in 1811 with numerous specimens of both plants and animals. Most notable was a species of dik-dik that was previously unknown to the people of England. A few years later, in 1814, he published the findings of his journey in A Voyage to Abyssinia, and travels into the interior of that country, executed under the orders of the British government in the years 1809 &1810.

Sources

'''To Be Continued. . . (After further research)'''

Henry Salt Notes (Thomas Ziervogel)
Article Analysis (reading aritcles below) for info missing in current Wiki page.

Henry Salt, Consul in Egypt 1816-1827 and Pioneer Egyptologist by CE Bosworth Nationalization and Personalization of the Egyptian Antiquities: Henry Salt a British General Consul in Egypt 1816 to 1827 by Shadia Mahmoud Tazdn2 (talk) 19:40, 10 March 2018 (UTC)
 * one of the few scholarly/journal articles able to find and download
 * from 2014 Bulletin of the John Rylands Library (Scholarly Journal)
 * document downloaded on computer
 * scholarly article from International Journal of Culture and History (2016)

Travels
After giving up on the goal of being a painter, Salt was permitted to travel with the English nobleman George Annesley, the 9th Viscount Valentia, after being recommended to him by a family member (Mahmoud). Lord Valentia and Salt would spend more than four years on their trip, spanning the British sphere of influence, going all over from the Cape of Good Hope, India, and the region of the Red Sea (Bosworth). Through their friendship, Valentia would come to describe Salt as a "secretary-draftsman" as Salt not only provided company for the Lord, but also sketches and illustrations of the various sites and scenes they encountered on their voyage (Mahmoud).

In 1805, Salt and Valentia split ways (Bosworth). Valentia went back to England to share word of their travels while Salt was sent on an exploration in to the northern part of Ethiopia with the primary purpose of opening up trade relations on behalf of English (Bosworth). During this venture, Salt took on the side mission of verifying and correcting the information about the region reported by the Scottish traveler, James Bruce many years earlier (Bosworth). He would go on to publish a book in 1814, A Voyage to Abyssinia, whose contents were on the culture, geography, customs, and topography of Ethiopia (Bosworth).

Consul General in Egypt
Through his book and details of exploration, Salt had earned himself a name in the British government and when an opening for the Consul General of Egypt opened up in 1815. Salt was recommended to the position by Lord Valentia and appointed to be the Consul General in Egypt (Mahmoud). In 1816, he arrived in Alexandria and traveled to Cairo were he would be stationed as consul (Bosworth). Once set up in Cairo, he began to work on his mission of securing antiquities and artifacts for the British Muesuem (Mahmoud). In order to successfully do this, he believed that he must first be on good terms with the ruler of Egypt, the Pasha Mohamed Ali (aka Mehemet Ali) (Mahmoud). Salt was able to foster beneficial relations between the British government and Ali acting as a middle man negotiating deals concerning trade and territorial rights, earning him the affection of Ali (Mahmoud). Ali was able to provide Salt with a good residence in the city and a place on his court in return for his help in negotiations (Mahmoud).

Excavations
From both his salary as consul and the inheritance he received from his father, within years of his new position, Salt had built up the financial means to begin his own private excavations (Bosworth). While continuing his official duties of excavating antiques for his home nation, he saw an opportunity for personal wealth on the private antiquities market (Mahmoud). With his powerful position as consul and now the financial availability to fund personal ventures, Salt began selling to private collectors and English nobles while at the same time amassing a sizable personal collection (Mahmoud).

Peer Review by Ab6gc
First of all, the writing was clear and I could follow what you were talking about very easily. Nothing was overly complicated or redundant, and it flowed well. An idea for Alex is to maybe specify what sections of the original article you are adding to or planning on creating. I think it was a good summary of parts of his life, but from looking at the original, it seemed that there was already some information there. If you are adding to it, I just think saying that would be nice. For Thomas, I think that a more fleshed out version of just one topic might be better, although I understand that with limited sources, you might be restricted. I only felt that it jumped around a bit when reading from section to section. I thought you both did a great job of presenting the facts only, and not inserting your opinion into the topic, although I don't think this is a topic that has many differing opinions. I found much of your information really intriguing and I think you both did a great job making someone that would read the article more interested in the topic. Ab6gc (talk) 22:01, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Peer review from Trazivious
First draft

First paragraph seems choppy. While it provides a lot of information in a short period of time, many facts don't flow with the others. It goes from when and where he was born, to where he went to school, then painting, but there doesn't seem to be much transitioning between them.

In the second paragraph, "after his run as.." is slightly metaphoric and should perhaps be "after his time as.." to sound more formal. Consider changing "ethiopia (called abyssinia at the time)" to "Abyssinia (now Ethiopia)"

Overall good, make sure to add citations

Second draft

Overall is good. Two comments. First is that in the wikipedia training, it mentioned be wary of articles that only have one or two sources, because they may be too biased or uninformed. Your draft relies entirely on Bosworth and Mahmoud, so perhaps find/cite more sources? Also, it seems like you are pulling sentences straight from the articles themselves, posting them in chronological order, and then citing every sentence. Perhaps either use more of your own words, or cite at the end of groups of sentences in chunks. It just seems too citation heavy and scripted.Trazivious (talk) 04:54, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

Combined Draft
Early life

Henry Salt was born in Lichfield on June 14, 1780 to parents Thomas Salt and Alice née Butt. He was the youngest of 8 kids and went to school in Lichfield, Market Bosworth, and finally in Birmingham under the teachings of his brother John Butt Salt. During his early life he took an interest in portrait painting. While in Lichfield he studied under a water color artist named John Glover and in 1979, he traveled to London where he studied first under Joseph Farington and then later under John Hoppner. He became quite good at getting the likenesses of people in his paintings, but unfortunately he was unable to get any real acclaim with his work so he eventually gave it up.

Early travels

After his time as as a portrait painter, Salt was permitted to travel with the English nobleman George Annesley, the 9th Viscount Valentia, as his secretary and draughtman after being recommended to him by Thomas Simon Butt. They went on an eastern tour in June of 1802 which took them through the British sphere of influence, going all over from the Cape of Good Hope, India, and the region of the Red Sea. Through their friendship, Valentia would come to describe Salt as a "secretary-draftsman" as Salt not only provided company for the Lord, but also sketches and illustrations of the various sites and scenes they encountered on their voyage. In 1805, Valentia sent Salt on a journey into Abyssinia (now Ethiopia) to meet with the ras of Tigré to open up trade relations on behalf of English. While visiting there, Salt gained the respect of the ras of Tigré. In 1806 he departed from Ethiopia back to England. His journey home took him through Egypt where he met the pasha Mehmet Ali.

In 1809, the British government employed Salt to go back Abyssinia and deliver presents to it's king as well as learn more about it's land and people. Upon arrival, he was unable to meet with the king due to unrest in the country so instead he went to stay with his friend the ras of Tigré. During this venture, Salt took on the side mission of verifying and correcting the information about the region reported by the Scottish traveler, James Bruce many years earlier. Salt came back to England in 1811 with numerous specimens of both plants and animals. Most notable was a species of dik-dik that was previously unknown to the people of England. He would go on to publish a book in 1814, A Voyage to Abyssinia, whose contents were on the culture, geography, customs, and topography of Ethiopia.

Consul General in Egypt

Through his book and details of exploration, Salt had earned himself a name in the British government and when an opening for the Consul General of Egypt opened up in 1815. Salt was recommended to the position by Lord Valentia and appointed to be the Consul General in Egypt. In 1816, he arrived in Alexandria and traveled to Cairo were he would be stationed as consul. Once set up in Cairo, he began to work on his mission of securing antiquities and artifacts for the British Muesuem. In order to successfully do this, he believed that he must first be on good terms with the ruler of Egypt, the Pasha Mohamed Ali (aka Mehemet Ali). Salt was able to foster beneficial relations between the British government and Ali acting as a middle man negotiating deals concerning trade and territorial rights, earning him the affection of Ali. Ali was able to provide Salt with a good residence in the city and a place on his court in return for his help in negotiations.

Excavations

From both his salary as consul and the inheritance he received from his father, within years of his new position, Salt had built up the financial means to begin his own private excavations. While continuing his official duties of excavating antiques for his home nation, he saw an opportunity for personal wealth on the private antiquities market. With his powerful position as consul and now the financial availability to fund personal ventures, Salt began selling to private collectors and English nobles while at the same time amassing a sizable personal collection.

Personal collection

Henry Salt is credited with selling three large personal collections from his time as the Consul General. The first collection, put together with the help of Belonzi, contained artifacts and pieces that Salt acquired from 1816 – 1818. When shipped to England and evaluated by specialist, the total value of the collection was approximately £8000, although it would be sold for much less. Records show that the collection ended up being sold in February of 1823. The sarcophagus of Seti I, a major piece of the collection was bought by the aristocrat Sir John Soane for £2000 and the rest was bought by the British Museum for the same price.

Following the assembly of his first collection, Salt began acquiring what would be known as his second collection, containing items he collected with the assistance of his Greek agent and interpreter, Giovanni d’Athanasi, from 1819 – 1824. While Salt’s primary intention was to sell to the British Museum again, this time for a pension of 600 per year. However, this would not end up being the case as the French royalty wanted to buy the collection and display it at the Louvre, which they did in 1826 for a total of £10,000.

Salt would spend the rest of his life putting together a third collection which featured his antiquities acquired from 1825 to his death in 1827. This collection was sold years after his death when an agent of his sold it to the British Museum for over £7000.

Notable artifacts


 * Head of Ramses II (Young Memnon)
 * Sarcophagus of Seti I
 * Head and arm of Thothmes III