User:Alex E Mitchell/It Happens Every Thursday/Emily.rose827 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alex E Mitchell


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When you read the plot description, can you follow the story of the movie? Note any parts that were confusing to you.


 * - I can follow the plot pretty well! I think adding a little bit more detail in certain areas would really give the article more definition. Like when they arrive at the Eden Archive how it is run down, is the main villain in the entire movie or just in certain parts, and is there more than one way that he is trying to drive the MacAvoys out of town, and why does he hate them so much. It reads great and the I can follow the plot really well! I would just add some more detail and then I think you're golden.

Are there internal wiki links to all relevant actors, production personnel, historical entities or events?


 * - Yes! Most of the actrices and actors have link going to their wikepedia page and most of the relevant places and ideas also have external links on them!

Are there citations for any facts that do NOT come from watching the movie itself?


 * - Yes there are! There aren't any external links going to where the information was gathered other than the reception section, which I think the reviewer grasped a good idea of how people received the movie. Good outside facts and reviews!

Do you see any grammatical issues that the writer should correct?


 * - Grammar looks really good! The only thing that is underlined is the names, but names aren't really a part of the dictionary so everything is completely fine!

Any other comments on the entry?

- Things look great! I would just add some details in the plot and maybe one more source for the receptions (if you can find any!), and I think you are good to go! Great job!!!!!!

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