User:Alex K. Tran/Marine conservation/Stan1500 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Ziyuanying
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Ziyuanying/sandbox

Lead evaluation
This group chose not to create a new Lead for the article but instead use the existing one. The existing lead in the article is pretty good. It is concise but yet informative. Because of this, I don't see the need to create a new lead.

Content evaluation
The group did an excellent job including relevant contents in their draft. However, a lot of the contents included can be improved by providing additional statistics or information. For example, for the overfishing section, it will be good if the group include quantitative data that can show how overfishing has severely damaged the marine ecosystem, and further explain how the changes can affect our daily lives as well. Other than this, the group can also improve the Prominent Campaigns section. Currently, rather than explaining the campaigns held by the NGOs to promote marine conservation, the section mainly explains about the organizations that work to promote marine conservation.

Tone and balance evaluation
So far, the information in the draft is presented in a neutral manner, there seems to be no underrepresented or overrepresented point of view. The draft is informative but not persuasive.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
The group utilized information from reliable sources. The sources used range from articles to journals and relevant books. However, it will be nice if the group expand the sources as they add more content to the draft. Some of the citation does not include clickable hyperlinks.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and media evaluation
The draft does not include additional images or media.

Overall evaluation
Overall, the draft is concise yet informative which is good. However, it can be further expanded to bring more improvements to the existing article. Below are my recommendations on how to further improve the draft:

- Add more data to back up the information in the overfishing section

- Restructure the Prominent Campaigns section so that the section explains more on the campaigns promoted by the various organization fighting for marine conservation rather than focusing on the organizations themselves.