User:Alex Winetrout/History of women in the United States/Katearb0n Peer Review

General info
User: Alex Winetrout
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Alex Winetrout/History of women in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):History of women in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Alex,

Lead
- Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?  It doesn’t appear that you have any plans to add to the lead, as this is a very extensive article, but it could benefit from some additional information from your research if you feel like it applies.

Content
- Is the content added relevant to the topic?

The content that you plan to add to the article does seem relevant to the topics, but it’s unclear where you plan to add these pieces of information. I assume you are still in the editing and drafting process. Maybe you plan to make the gilded age a new subsection? For the women’s athletics you might plan to make a more substantial paragraph.

Is the content added up-to-date?

I think that from what you have so far this information is relevant to reflection upon women’s identities in the time periods mentioned from a modern lens.

Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

It still seems like you are in the drafting process, so as you add more information it will definitely start to come together. You may want to provide in your sandbox which paragraphs you intend to add to or if you want to create an entirely new section.

Tone and Balance
Is the content added neutral?

I would agree that the content you plan to add so far is neutral. You do a good job of writing evidence and fact based attitudes about womens roles and responsibilities and it is backed by the writings that you include.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?:

Although this page is about women, you may want to explore different cultural, racial, and social class groups. Especially under a large topic like yours you could take any route. You do talk briefly about white and black girl being separated in swimming which could be a really powerful point if you plan to comment further on this.

Sources and References
Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

From my end you have two sources, i know that you probably plan to build upon this. Each source for each topic you have drafted is very strong, but as you add more it will start to become more well rounded.

Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? /Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list? If not, can you think of anything we've read that might be useful for them?Are the sources current?

For class material, I suggest you might want to focus on one of the articles that we read that discusses feminism or gender identities. In particular we read about Sklar about a lot of female roles. Its entirely up to you which class article you will include, but any one that takes on women’s identities could easily be used in the article.

Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?

Each of your sources hits a different angle for the specific topic that you choose. As you add more articles try to gain different lenses and perspectives.

Organization
Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

The information that you provide to add into the article is interesting and helpful but doesn’t provide much structure or context. If you wanted to add other passages into your sandbox and edit them in a specific section then it might be more helpful to see where you plan to take your evidence.

Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

There aren’t any alarming grammatical errors but i would suggest you try to make your points flow better with intro material.

Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

You have two very clear sections of information that you plan to add on to. For the first section i would either list what you plan to include this information in or make it a new section.

Overall impressions
Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?/How can the content added be improved?

This original article is very long and extensive. It might be overwhelming to add to it. If you are stuck you might want to consider editing what is already there and then finding sources to add to it.

What are the strengths of the content added?

You provide interesting, informative and useful insights for this article.

Additional Questions

 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources? not at the moment. There are only 2 for right now
 * Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list? If not, can you think of anything we've read that might be useful for them? No, i suggested above maybe some other course readings that may continue on womens perspectives and identities.
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material? Womens history has almost everything to do with our course. I think that the information about the Gilded age is interesting and important when understanding how women were excluded from activities that required physical and mental strain.
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article? Yes, everything under the gilded age gives historical context to a certain point in history.
 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further? Even though you are tackling a daunting article, everything you’ve included thus far about women’s sports and physical activity is super interesting and important to understand how women were treated during this time.