User:Alexa Bierstock/Organizational communication/Alexa Bierstock Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

General article before student edits have been made - our class has not done drafts yet, so instead I'll review a few sections of the article that need improvement.


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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There are issues with the entire article, but I will just focus on a few key sections that need to be improved.

Perspectives section:

- Only includes the perspective of one scholar; adding more scholars could reinforce this section since it is currently biased to the ideas of the singular scholar who is listed

- Should highlight why the academic is considered an expert in the field - why is their perspective important? Was it pivotal in organizational communication scholarship?

Role of Organizational Communication section:

- Just a large blurb of ideas that are not connected to the role of organizational communication; needs to be made more specific

- Writing style makes it very hard to read and confusing

- Some points in it do not make sense and most have no citations backing them up

- Could be separated into different headings to highlight different roles and make it easier to read

Theoretical Approaches section:

- Some of them (constitutive, feminist) need more detail to be understood

- Some claims in this section are not backed up and don't seem to be correct (i.e., "Sexual harassment in the workplace is a foremost concern for feminist organizational communication scholars")

Interpersonal Communication section

- Needs to be organized with headings

- Needs more citations

- Also just a big blurb of ideas that are not specific to the idea of organizational communication; a section like this does not need that much detail as interpersonal communication should have its own page

Overall, this article seems to be all over the place and should be condensed so that it is easier to understand for the average person. There is lots of repetitive information that can and should be cut down. Many sections could also be organized in a way that makes it easier to read (i.e., adding headings to separate different ideas). Most areas also need more citations.