User:Alexabowers/Philosophical zombie/Alexabowers Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

KAlszko


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alexabowers/Philosophical_zombie?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Philosophical zombie

Evaluate the drafted changes
The text is well informed and very well written. The sentence "a zombie world is a hypothetical world indistinguishable from our world but in which all beings lack conscious experience" could be placed at the beginning of the definition paragraph, as it best details what the theory entails. The example is very interesting, but more details could be added, if taken from the lecture, that would be useful to understanding what it means to not have a consciousness outside of a physical level. The use of external links to define various concepts is excellent, and the writing is easy to navigate and informative. In the second paragraph, the two points of view are well explained, but could use some more context to present them to the ready (for example, explaining why the theory is so debated and what it truly represents). The citations are complete. Overall, great work.