User:Alexafrangella/New Orleans crime family/HiggyPiggyZ Peer Review

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Alexafrangella
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 * New Orleans crime family

Peer Review 1
I like how Alexa added a section about the downfall of the gang. I also like the "Historical Leadership" section and the sub-headings within it. I think it is an interesting way to see how the gang has changed over the years since many of the Boss's have their own Wikipedia pages.

I think Alexa can improve the structure of the article by adding some more sub-headings, which will allow her to get more specific information and expand the article. I also think instead of having important people in the history section, there should be an added section titled "Influential People" and the people can have their own subsections. I think it will help make the structure of the article clearer. I also think the end of the lead contains some information that is too specific.

The "Downfall" section is confusing since there are so many different players and reasons for the gangs downfall. As I previously mentioned, more sub-headings might help break down the "Downfall" section and make it easier to understand.

Peer Review 2
I think the lead is too specific and doesn't touch upon all the topics in the article. The lead should be an introduction to what's going to be discussed but the lead for this article goes into some specifics about mob bosses and the structure of the crime group. I think a good chunk of that information should be moved into the body of the article. While certain mentions are important in the lead, since a large part of the article does have to do with the mob bosses, I think some of the specifics can be taken out. I think the first two sentences are okay, but the ones that follow should definitely be re-worded/simplified.

Also, like I said in the previous peer-review, I think there needs to be more sub-headings, specifically under "History." The only proper historical sub-heading is "Early History," and I think that more time periods should be discussed, allowing the information to be split up neatly.