User:Alexgoriani/Susan Schneider/LazyFish45 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alec Olive (I have no contact with them so I do not know their names)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alexgoriani/Susan_Schneider?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Susan Schneider

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Peer Review from absent qualia group:

1.Have they understood and properly used class material?

This group has, for the most part, properly paraphrased the information given in the class material and has included some of the topics addressed. The way the information is released could be slightly modified for a more standarized register (there is a lot of repetition). However, there is a lack of information. Adding more details or broad topics that have been addressed would be a good idea to improve the quality of the test.

2. Have they included the material in a way that appropriately improves the article?

There is potential for improvement in their contribution to the article but it is difficult to comment on it since their contribution is at the earlier stage. They seem to be on the right track.

3. What have they done particularly well?

This group does a good job at explaining that Schneider tests computer consciousness using the ACT test and Chip Test. They explain that the Chip test is much more different than the Turing test, even going into depth about what the test is.

4. What could they improve?

This group is missing a alot of their content. They have began to touch on Schneiders tests but need to improve on expanding on the meaning, concept and give examples of them. They should include more information on Schneider as a person, her accomplishments, her ideas and her goals. There is a need for more information regarding machine consciousness and her stance. Also adding multiple sources, since diversifying the sources is key, but also ensuring that they are proper sources.