User:AlexisRosendahl/Mud Island, Memphis/Deep sea coral Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AlexisRosendahl


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:AlexisRosendahl/Mud Island, Memphis


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mud Island, Memphis

Evaluate the drafted changes
This was a very interesting article. I thought it explained much better than the original article (which I read) what Mud Island really is.

The lead section should have some parts added to it to briefly go over more of the sections. The part about restaurants wasn't really talked about in either version, so I think that should be taken out. Something should be added in the lead about the history and governance sections that were put in about Mud Island. Maybe you could mention briefly the airport, and the different names of Mud Island and Mud Island Park that they were using or were going to use.

For the sections, I liked what you added. It made it more interesting, and told a lot more about Mud Island. When I read about Harbor Town, I wanted to know how many people live there.*

Having "includes" twice in a row in the Harbor Town section could be changed.

What were the artifacts of in the Museum for the most part? The old article implied it was mostly about steamboat history.

I was confused as to why the last part in the description of the River Walk was taken out. In the sources, they had really amazing descriptions of it. More could be written about it. Also, the part about the Mississippi River Trail was taken out, and it seemed fine, it just needed more explanation.

I was also curious as to who had performed at the amphitheater over the years. Why did it close down? Was it just because it needed renovating? Did they not have enough money to do it right away?

I think the part about what the kayaks cost sounds sort of like advertising and should be taken out. The article could just mention that they are rentable and move on. Someone could probably go to a Mud Island tourist's website to look that information up instead of Wikipedia.

The Notable Events section seemed unlike Wikipedia, especially the second event, which was sort of a magazine type story. I think that part should be taken out.

"Mud Island had been formed" should probably be "Mud Island was formed"

The sources seemed really good. They talked about what was mentioned in the article consistently. * I thought in the "scale model" source number 4 that the part about Mud Island originally being a sort of refuge for homeless and poor people was really interesting and could maybe go in the history section. Source number 6, the "New efforts..." one, could be used to talk more about why the amphitheater was closed and what they were renovating. The Mud Island: About Us, source is good, but it seems like an advertising self promotional thing, so I don't know if Wikipedia wants it as a source. Sources 7 and 9 are identical, except for the date retrieved, so one could be taken out.

I liked the pictures in the original article, and I hope there will be similar pictures in the new one. I think a map of the Mississippi River showing Mud Island would be helpful to know better where it is as you read about it, especially if you aren't from Memphis. I think it would be great to have a picture of the amphitheater and maybe of the museum from the outside. These might be hard to get with the copyright stuff, though. The caption that says "Park and Museum" is a bit vague.

Overall I think this article is really good and a major improvement over what is on Wikipedia currently. I think the lead section needs to be changed up a bit, and there are a few grammar things that could be fixed. There was some stuff taken out that could be put back in. More could be added in some of the sections to tell the reader more. There were two sections, about kayak rental and the notable events, that I would recommend be taken out, because they are good information but don't seem to belong in a Wikipedia article. This is written well and doesn't seem biased or inappropriate on all the other parts. I hope this article makes it to Wikipedia!

Response to Peer Review
Thanks for reviewing my article!

I agree the lead section needs to be updated, I definitely overlooked that and will be adding to it. I think adding a piece about the restaurants under the Activities section would be good.

I think including the population of Harbor Town is a great idea! I was not able to find many sources pertaining to Harbor Town, but I will do my best to find that.

I was able to go in and switch up the wording so includes isn't in the Harbor Town section twice. Thanks for pointing that out!

I took out the last part of the River Park section because it was mentioning things that either no longer exist or that are not available to the public. Mud Island has gone through so many changes over the years, I felt that if I put that in I would have to include everything else that had come and gone as well. However, I do agree that more could be added to this section, my only fear was using other people's descriptions because the sources got to be very detailed and Wikipedia is supposed to be a neutral overview of the topic.

Finding information on the amphitheater was harder than I thought it would be. It has been shut down since 2018 and is in desperate need of renovation which is why I didn't add much to that section, but I'm still searching for reliable sources to support that section.

I agree the Recreation section needs some work, and I will link a site that has that same information that's currently listed.

Those are good ideas for information to add and I will definitely consider them! I went in and fixed the duplicate citation, thanks for pointing that out! The About Us source is from the Mud Island website, but I only pulled neutral information from it, so I think it should be okay.

I'm working on adding images at the moment, but I agree that some of the ones on there already are good. I would like to add an image of the footbridge, the Memphis sign, and the amphitheater.

I would like to keep the Notable Events section since the events are things that occurred on Mud Island that are interesting and could draw attention to the article, but I see where you are coming from. I am planning on fixing the Recreation section, so no worries there.

Thank you for reviewing, your tips were very helpful!