User:Alexjacullo/Portrayal of women scientists in film/Jalfield Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alexjacullo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alexjacullo/Portrayal_of_women_scientists_in_film?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Portrayal of women scientists in film

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content added was both relevant and recent. It was also well structured and grammatically correct. The information added is easy to read, clear, and concise. The citations that were added were accessible.

While I may agree with a lot of the information provided in the article, both by my peer and other wiki editors, some of the information in the article could be seen as biased or an attempt to be persuasive. Some of the content is not 100% neutral. For example, a recent edit that was added was, "Notably, the depiction of Princess Shuri as an accomplished young Black woman in STEM speaks to a critical intersectional identity that is often excluded from film and other media representation." Again, while I may agree with the above information, it does not seem to be up to Wiki's neutral standards. As it is a statement that I can either agree or disagree with, it is obviously not a certain fact, and, therefore, should be modified to be unbiased or non argumentative.

The organization of the article is good. It is easy to find information you are looking for due to the well structured and separated subsections. Alex did a great job of adding the new content in the proper subsection for easy accessibility and better organization.

The sandbox and bibliography pages are really well developed. It was easy to see the changes in the Wiki article based on the sandbox draft as the information was moved directly from one to the other. The bibliography is extensive and the articles are accessible. It's really good to comprise a bibliography with all potential sources, and all articles that have been used in forming new content to be added, whether or not it is directly used. All sources used to develop the new content should be cited, which is exactly what Alex did in her bibliography.

Overall, the article edits and citations were well developed, but some of the edits do not comply with Wiki's rules for neutrality.