User:Alexpope01/Silver mining/MelCarruthers Peer Review

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Alexpope01
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Hi Alex! Here is my peer review of your article draft. I hope it helps!

Lead

I find that the Lead section is too short and lacks detail. In general, it does not reflect the new content added because it is simply missing a brief description of the article's main sections. It does open up with a concise and clear definition of silver mining, however, it does not set the stage for what readers can expect to find within this article. For example, it should allude to the fact that the article will touch on the excavation process, ore processing, recycling, production areas, its history, and environmental effects.

Content

All the content added is relevant to the topic. Adding a section on Silver Scrap Processing allows readers to develop a more comprehensive understanding of the topic. I would suggest that before jumping into the three main techniques of silver scrap processing you introduce what silver scrap is and its sources.

The content is up-to-date with most sources not being any older than the mid-2000s. You may choose to update some of the sources from the late 90s or early 2000s if there are sources with more recent data available. However, the content is still based on credible sources.

I would say that all the content in the article is relevant and belongs. I don't think there are any major sections missing however, I would consider adding a bit more detail to each section. The article seems relatively short in my opinion for such a broad topic. Going into a bit more detail may allow readers to gather a more whole understanding and limit readers from needing to ask further questions. For example, in the excavation section, why can the process of using explosives to shatter veins into manageable pieces be dangerous? In addition, the environmental effects section describes that silver mining has caused mercury to contaminate the environment, but what effects does this have?

Tone and Balance

The content added is neutral and unbiased. It simply states the facts without adding personal opinions or persuading the readers to have a certain standpoint. It also does not appear to include any viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented.

Sources and References

All the new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information. With most of the new content being under the Silver Scrap Processing section, I noticed that it relies on information from a singular source. It may be beneficial to draw some information from a variety of sources. In addition, the source is from 2003. Although it is a reliable source that contains valuable information, there may be a more recent source that has more up-to-date silver scrap processing techniques.

It is good to see that many of the sources are coming from academic sources such as published books and academic journal articles. In addition, there are online sources used from credible sites. Because some print books were used not all sources are readily accessible to all readers. In addition, some scholarly articles only permit access through an institution.

Organization

The content added is well-written. It is concise, clear, and easy to read. The history section is quite long in comparison to other sections, however, I think this is appropriate since silver is an ore that has been mined for a long period of time. I think the recycling section is short and could use some expansion. In addition, I would consider moving the history section higher up in the article since it provides a great deal of background information.

Minor grammatical errors (corrections in bold):


 * "Methods for mining silver change for everybody of ore."
 * "The method that is chosen depends on the grade of the ore, the steepness and shape of the terrain, its depth, host rock, transportation availability, and other economic factors."
 * As a byproduct of the mining of lead and copper, silver ores are often purified by froth flotation.
 * However, jewelry and silverware are not as important of a source of recycled metal compared to electronics and photographic film.

These are just a couple of examples of minor mistakes. I recommend using Grammarly to check the article's grammar, spelling, and sentence structure before publishing.

Images and Media

There is a variety of images throughout this article that are well-captioned. I don't think it is necessary to make any changes or add any more visuals.

Overall Impressions

Overall, I think the content added improved the overall quality of the article by providing additional information about silver scrap. It is written in a manner that is easy to understand. I think the content added could maybe draw on more sources to create more diverse and accurate content. My biggest recommendation is to add a bit more detail to each section to make it more complete for readers. The foundational information is there but I think it could really benefit from further explanations.

With a bit more editing I think this article will come together very nicely! Great work so far!

- Melanie