User:Alfa7158/Sarah Drasner/Zieg5065 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alfa7158


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Alfa7158/Sarah Drasner


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sarah Drasner

Evaluate the drafted changes
Article looks like it has a great structure to it, however, there does not seem to be much material within the page. As far as grammar and spelling goes, there are only a few suggestions I have. First, head statement should be, "Sarah Drasner is the Vice President of Vue." Then go on to add her roles in the company, but leave the first sentence to only her professional title or why she is notable. "Sarah work as developer at Netlify, and a writer at CSS-Tricks" should read, "Drasner currently works as a developer at Netlify and a writer at CSS-Tricks." I would suggest replacing some of the "She also" statements with phrases like furthermore, additionally, and replacing "She" with her full name or last name - never use just her first name. Some of the sentences do not have a capital letter at the beginning of the sentence. The final suggestion I would change in the Career section is "Additionally, Sara is writer of SVG Animations book" to "Additionally, Sarah Dresner is a writer of the SVG Animations book." Looks like the name was misspelled, but again, do not just use her first name.