User:Alibarnabenelson/Moderata Fonte/TaliaMary Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?  Alibarnabenelson
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Alibarnabenelson/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Not yet
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes I think it does
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? I think it could be explained on

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I think they could add more information about how it contributes to feminist thought.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? Not that I could see
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? I think they could add more sources!
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? I think there could be more sources added
 * Are the sources current? There is one that is, but I think more current sources could be added.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Some of them do.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, but edits have been suggested
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Yes, but the edits have been suggested.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes, but I think it could be improved once they expand on their bullet points by adding in section headings.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? No images yet
 * Are images well-captioned? No images yet
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? No images yet
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? No images yet

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes, but they need to expand on their bullet points
 * What are the strengths of the content added? I think they are exploring new issues!
 * How can the content added be improved? I think more could be added!

Overall evaluation
Hello! I don't know if Wikipedia will show you who is reviewing your article, but this is Talia if you have any questions about my peer review please ask me in class I would love to chat about it more! First I really enjoyed what you have worked on so far I think it's pretty interesting and adds in a meaningful way to the Wikipedia page about Moderata Fonte, and I think they seem very interesting. But there is lots of things I could see you improving. first of all, I think someone already suggested edits to the article I agree with all of these and think you should put them in place.I think you need to add in a bigger intro to this paragraph because it seems very disconnected from the first few paragraphs: "One of Pozzo (Moderata)’s first known works is a musical play performed before the Doge Da Ponte in 1581 at the festival of St. Stephen’s Day. Le Feste [The Feasts] includes about 350 verses with several singing parts. Also in 1581, she published her epic poem I tredici canti del Floridoro [The Thirteen Cantos of Floridoro] dedicated to Bianca Cappello and her new husband, Francesco I de' Medici, the Grand Duke of Tuscany. This poem is perhaps the second chivalric work published by an Italian woman, after Tullia d’Aragona’s Il Meschino, which appeared in 1560. (needs a citation)". I think you could change it to say " [Out side of her personal life Pozzo was known as a play write, and a [blank]] One of Pozzo (Moderata)’s first known works is a musical play performed before the Doge Da Ponte in 1581 at the festival of St. Stephen’s Day. Le Feste [The Feasts] includes about 350 verses with several singing parts. Also in 1581, she published her epic poem I tredici canti del Floridoro [The Thirteen Cantos of Floridoro] dedicated to Bianca Cappello and her new husband, Francesco I de' Medici, the Grand Duke of Tuscany. This poem is perhaps the second chivalric work published by an Italian woman, after Tullia d’Aragona’s Il Meschino, which appeared in 1560. (needs a citation)". Finally, I think it's important to focus and build more on how she impacted feminist thought, as I don't think that is made clear and I think you can add that in (it's also important for the course). I think adding in and using more sources is important!