User:Alichtwa/Moabite language/Pufferfish12 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alichtwa


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alichtwa/Moabite_language?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Moabite language

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'm impressed by the substantial amount of changes that you've made to the article! The draft looks great, and I think you've greatly improved the organization of the article compared to the original.

Here are some of my suggestions:


 * Since you're reorganizing the information and putting parts of the original lead section into separate sections, I would recommend drafting a new lead section that will briefly describe the major sections.
 * The first sentence in the Grammar section is too long and can be split into multiple sentences.
 * The Isogloss section is a great idea, but I think there are ways you can improve it.
 * The first few statements in the Isogloss section need references.
 * Additionally, from my understanding, an isogloss refers to a geographical boundary that shows a clear distinction between linguistic features in a language, but the section does not mention what that geographical boundary is. If you could estimate where the geographical boundary lies (e.g., north Jordan compared to south Jordan), it would strengthen this section. However, I think this section is overall confusing, and I'm not sure what the main point is - what is the isogloss and where is the boundary? I'm unsure how the example of the verb "to be" and the information about the prefix preterite tie into this section.
 * One of the sentences begins with "Of course," which is not a neutral tone, so it would be best to remove that phrase.
 * There are some grammatical errors in the Controversy section.

Besides these suggestions, you're doing a wonderful job!