User:Alichtwa/Moabite language/Ryanscott06 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Alichtwa


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alichtwa/Moabite_language?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Moabite language
 * Moabite language

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your article on the Moabite language is coming along very well. You have done well by adding plenty of relevant information and by truly learning about the language, so that it becomes easier for you to write about in a scholarly manner. Your work will nearly double what is on the current Wikipedia for Moabite, and that is remarkable. A few suggestions that are simply to help and to not detract from the work you have done:


 * Where you discuss Moabite's grammar, there is a reference section in the middle of the section. If this is purposeful, disregard, but it does seem like a mistake that would be worth correcting.
 * When giving examples, it may be beneficial to group them together in a table and compare them to other Semitic languages so that audiences can understand the unique features of the language, rather than putting them in the middle of sentences.
 * Where you discuss the controversies with examples in German, it may be beneficial to just paraphrase, rather than adding the German descriptions in the article, mostly for simplicity.
 * As a suggestion, if you could simply have a sentence or two from the Mesha Stele in a separate section entitled "Example Text" with an English translation, this could really help in understanding more about the language.

Overall, great job and keep up the good work!