User:Alise boal/Fan activism/Zhifanfu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Alise boal)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alise%20boal/Fan_activism?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Fan activism

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

It is smart to use the topic's background as a lead to start the paragraph. The amount of information you provided is concise and enjoyable to read.

Content:

I like your idea to insert the Kpop group and #FreeBritney Movement into this since the Kpop fan base is so large and represents the concept of "fandom". #FreeBritney is another significant movement organized and run by fans. I have one question: I did not see the #FreeBritney on the actual wiki page, and I would love to know why you decided to exclude this topic. I think #FreeBritney is a symbolic movement to show how fan activists held this movement and made a change, but I would love to hear your thoughts.

Tone and balance:

Your tone is neutral, and the language used is unbiased.

Source and Reference:

The sources are all topic related, and the scholarly sources are trustworthy and highly credible. I enjoyed reading the article "How K-Pop Fans Actually Work as a Force for Political Activism in 2020".

Organization:

The organization is pretty clear and well-structured. You added a new section based on the already-existing content, which makes this topic more comprehensive. I like how Kpop was added as a single and separate section, and I think this way makes the whole page easier to read. I noticed that you introduced Kpop history in some different aspects, and I know Wikipedia has its timeline function to show how a group evolves in a period. It would be interesting to put everything in a timely manner to see how the page turns out.

Image and Media:

The article does not have any images and media included so far. I think it will be more visually interesting to read if there are images related to K-pop and Donald Trump added here. When I read the content as a user for this page, I wanted to see how fans went against Trump to support BLM. Since the K-pop fan group is really large and are all over the world, the visual would reinforce this aspect.