User:Alisondoepker/William Kretzschmar/Aehollar Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alisondoepker, Gabrielledrake, Gracie Edelen, Hayden.osborne


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Alisondoepker/William_Kretzschmar&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead-

Introductory sentence sums up the general premise of the article well.

The lead does not have specific summaries of all of the main sections in the article (honors and rewards)

There is an incomplete sentence in the lead: “ Little is known about Kretzschmar's early life. He is originally from”

Content-

The content is relevant to the topic

Since the article is in the beginning stages, I believe that all the information has not been added yet, meaning it could use more content if possible.

There is missing content in the lead section as I described earlier

May be helpful to include separate sections on the projects the person has been involved in

Tone and Balance-

Content does not seem biased or persuasive

Sources and References-

The links in the main article worked and I was able to visit all of them

I was not able to visit any of the links in the reference list

I was not able to view the first link, but if it was written by William Kretzchmar, I am unsure how reliable sources are if they were written by the person of interest themselves

Organization-

Easy to read, however there are some grammatical errors throughout the article

Images and Media-

No images

Overall Impression-

I do not believe this article is complete, needs more information and grammatical and missing areas corrected

The information seemed unbiased and well organized

I think more sections need to be added, for example maybe more on the works he has done

The lead section could be cleaned up to better start off the article