User:AliviahLelii/Child mortality/Abbyprodente Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AliviahLelii


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Child mortality

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content added to the article is very useful because good statistics were added. They put in perspective how big of an issue this is and how many people are affected by it. I like it was explained why information was taken out; It doesn't make sense to keep information was taken out; It doesn't make sense to keep information in the article if there is no source to back it up. Within the 5 groups of premature deaths, examples of birth defects or most common ones could be added if they differ from the later mentioned causes of death. Again, later in the article, more statistics were added which are helpful but there is no in text citation to back it up. The article is organized in a way that is easy to read and understand. It gives clear information leaving the reader with minimal questions. It has no detected bias and doesn’t try to persuade the reader.