User:Aliviayoung/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Andy Schor - I am evaluating this article.

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.)

I chose this article because there is a lot of content missing and he is the mayor of Lansing, my home city. My first impression of the article is that it is incredibly short, and only includes a bit about his personal life.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead section: The first sentence is good, but the introduction does not provide a summary of the other topics in the article. It is very concise, but probably too short.

Content: There is not nearly enough content about him. The early life and education part is only a sentence long. The content of the career section is relevant to his life as politician, but I wonder if there is more work he has done. I like that it mentions he is the first Jewish mayor of Lansing, which addresses topics related to historically underrepresented groups.

Tone and balance: The article is incredibly neutral, and only mentions that he is a Democrat. It does not mention the views he holds or who he has worked with, besides Gary Peters and Jennifer Granholm. I think the article would be better if it mentioned the things he has advocated for during his time as Mayor.

Sources and references: All of the resources listed seem to come from credible sources. Some of the sources are more current than others, but that's because they come from the years he was working. 2 out of the 3 links I checked worked. One of them said I couldn't go on the website because I'm not connected to a private internet source, which is concerning.

Organization and writing quality: The writing quality and organization is good. The sentences are grammatically correct, and the article is well organized, although it is short.

Images and Media: There is only 1 image, and it is of him. I think images of the places he has worked and maybe his family would be good additions. I also think they should use a better image of him, because the one that is currently there does not seem like it is a professionally shot picture of him.

Talk page: The only addition on the talk page is from a bot.

Overall impressions: This is a well written article for what it is, but it needs to be longer and more detailed.