User:Alli St. John/Zion National Park/Emmjohnson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alli St. John


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Alli St. John/Zion National Park
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alli%20St.%20John/Zion_National_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Zion National Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Miniscule change to #6: I would say "Firearms are prohibited within park buildings." Similar change to #7, both of which would make things easier for the reader.

Otherwise, I think this is a very well written and interesting addition to the article! Great job in finding something that is not included in this already robust topic and remains unbiased. I'm curious as to where these might be included; I was thinking maybe the end of the article would be best, either before or after the activities section. Both of your embedded citations worked and were easy to find. Very well done and I look forward to seeing this information published, as I think it is very pertinent information to be added to the article.