User:Allisonk444/Spore/Kaitlin3farrell Peer Review

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Peer Review
Lead: In terms of the lead, I noticed that you included an extra sentence to talk about the origins of the Spore. I appreciate you adding this content as it allows us to know when it was first discovered, a very necessary detail when it comes to biology. I believe that the lead describes the spore accurately in terms of what it is, how it occurs, different types of spores, etc. These are all then further explained in the document.

Content: In terms of content, I feel that the original wikipedia page does a great job explaining the information about the spore. It explains the different type of spores, how they are used, etc. I appreciate the fact that you included the origin of spores. It is always important to know about how the spore was found about as we didn't always have the access to the resources that we do today (i.e. microscopes, etc.). One thing I want to mention is that in terms of content, I feel like you could further expand on each type of spore. Perhaps include distinct characteristics of those spores (color, size, etc.) to help make them further stand out from one another.

Tone and Balance: In terms of tone, I feel that you do a great job at keeping a neutral, non-biased tone. It is important to make sure that you keep this tone throughout the paper which I believe you do. I feel like you could expand more on the classification aspect. I feel that in that area, the spores are not talked about as much as they could as there are links to areas that describe them.

References: I noticed that you added a bunch of references to your paper. This is awesome! I checked a few of them out and they seemed to be well accredited articles, so I have no complains there. In the content you created, I noticed you had references that backed up what was being said.

Organization: In terms of organization, I felt that this article was very well organized. Each paragraph had a heading that summed up what was going to be addressed in the paragraph. In terms of clarity, there are definitely areas where I was a bit confused or the terminology was a bit much. I recommend just re-reading the paper out loud to make sure that everything flows well and that your grammar is accurate.

Media: There is some original media from the original creators of the wikipedia page. In terms of media, I recommend as much as you can, without taking away from the text. I recommend adding images of each type of spore, what an immobile vs. mobile spore looks like so that visually oriented learners (i.e. myself) have a better way of picturing what a spore may look like.

Overall Impressions: Overall, I feel like you did a really good job. I feel that there are definitely areas where you could clarify and improve the flow of the article. I recommend adding pictures as there are lots of different spores. There are also areas where you could expand and in those areas, I feel that this will help with the article to improve its classification. You did a great job in terms of organization and balance. Keep it up!