User:Allisonpasechnick/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Talk:Captivity (animal)

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I am an animal science major and I love animals. I feel there is a lot of misinformation out there sometimes and when I found this article, I just thought it could use some suggestions. It's easier and much more interesting to review articles and topics that you like and care about.

Lead Section[edit]
This article could use a clearer and more specific introductory sentence on what animal captivity is and how it happens, rather than immediately divulging possible repercussions on animal behavior.

Content[edit]
The content seemed to focus heavy on instincts and studies from about 50 years ago, however, it does not ever really state how, when, or why animals are in captivity. The article is extremely detailed and should have more explanations in laymen's terms rather than stating out-of-context facts pulled from outdated sources.

Tone and Balance[edit]
This article is biased and trying to persuade the reader that animal captivity is bad for the animal. Animal captivity could have been shown in other lights and I feel a lot of information is missing and only one side of evidence is being supported.

Sources and References[edit]
The first and the fifth reference in this article does not work. This article used a source from an Animal Behavior study on dogs from 1968, and is trying to use that information to support animal captivity. Dogs were the 3rd domesticated animal to humans that we know, and most of the time animal captivity is spoken of when talker of large mammals, so I do not think the two are comparable, nor is the study used for evidence relevant. (Alleviation of Learned Helplessness in The Dog, Vol 73, No. 3, 256-262).

Organization and Writing Quality[edit]
This article is well-written but seems a bit scattered. Some broad details are missing where other minute ones seem to have been overly indulged on. This article is missing sections and an Introduction. This article does not have any pictures or graphical data.

Overall Impression[edit]
This article seems to be quite under-developed but has a backbone to create a page full of great information for users to learn from.