User:Allisonrdorman/Lesbian feminism/Jackie.gran42 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Allisondorman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Lesbian Feminism
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Allisonrdorman/Lesbian_feminism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lesbian feminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is a good introduction which describes the term and basic information necessary to gain a further understanding on the topic. I don't believe you made any changes to the lead, however, I don't think any changes were necessary. The lead was very strong and introduced key ideas and people later mentioned in the article.

The overall content of the article was very informative. I can see that the information in your sandbox was to be added to the Separatism section of the article but I'm not sure in which specific order. I checked the edit history and noticed you made edits to the article but then someone else made edits again. That being said, the information in your sandbox would help to enhance the section on separatism. Your edits would make the article flow better. The whole article goes into to detail very well but barley touches on Dianic paganism then takes a quick turn to describe womyn's land. I can see in your sandbox that you chose to remove the sentence on womyn's land in the separatism section and I would have done the same. It doesn't feel too relevant in that particular spot, and also the article provides a section on womyn's land later so it isn't necessary there.

The content is very relevant to the overall topic and does a good job of discussing both the history of lesbian feminism and the mainstream movements. I do believe that the article is balanced, it is very informative and gives factual information, but does not try to persuade the reader. The article used a variety of sources, and from what I can tell, they all seemed to be very thorough with active links. Most of the information presented is very thorough, there are a couple gaps, such as the one in the separatism section, but for the most part the article does a good job of explaining new terms or concepts. The information flows well and is organized well. The article does not contain many images but the few that it does are relevant. I might suggest adding a few more photos so the article seems less dense, just because its super wordy and informative, this might repel the average reader.

Overall, the article Lesbian feminism provides quality research and in depth information on the topic. The content you added helps the article flow much better, and explains a topic that was only briefly mentioned. The only real suggestion I have is adding a couple more pictures, but other than that I think the article is great.