User:Allysch/Dissociative disorders/MaddiMcg Peer Review

General info
Allysch
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Allysch/Dissociative disorders:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dissociative disorders
 * Dissociative disorders

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you did a great job with your article drafts and your article topic was very interesting and informative. The lead of your draft  is concise and was updated to show your newly added content, and includes and introductory sentence that accurately describes the articles topic. The lead does not include brief overview's of all the article's sections, but does cover the more informative sections of what the disease is, possible causes, and treatment. The content added is up to date and relevant to the discussion topic. I think there may be some content missing, but you still gave detailed and important content. Mostly, the content added is very straight forward and of a neutral tone and reporting perspective. The content added does not aim to persuade the reader in one direction over another. The content provided accurately reflect the cited sources and is well written, easy to read and understand without any grammatical errors. Overall, you did a fantastic job on your change. The only recommendation/critique I would make would be to maybe provide more examples of disorders to compare/contrast dissociation disorder to. In your lead, you contrasted some psychological trauma induced dissociative disorders to depersonalization-degeneralization disorder to show a difference in mechanism/disorder characteristic.