User:Allysch/Dissociative disorders/Michellevp16 Peer Review

General info
Allysch
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Allysch/Dissociative disorders
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Dissociative disorders

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Overall, the lead is clear, concise, and informative. The lead is allows the reader to get a good, broad understanding of the topic. I would recommend touching on major sections in the lead even if it is just a sentence or two. The lead does a good job at presenting information that will be touched on later. In my opinion, The second paragraph could be separated into its own section titled "Types of Dissociative Disorders" or something similar. By creating a new section, it would allow a better flow for the reader. Additionally, if the new section is created, the lead section should acknowledge that there are different types dissociative disorders.

Content and Source/References

The content presented is relevant to the topic. Additionally, the references are up to date. I agree with the possible changes to the medication section. The changes are well written; however, make sure to cite them with the most up to date information. Make sure all information is cited from a reliable up to date reference. The article does have some uncited information.

Tone and Balance

Overall, the article is neutral. The articles claims do not appear biased. Additionally, the article does not have a particular viewpoint. The content of the article provides the reader with a neutral stand point. I greatly appreciate that there is a section on the current debates related to dissociative disorders. I would recommend looking into the last two paragraphs of the current debates section because citations are needed for three sentences. Additionally, I would just make sure that the section is a neutral as it can be especially because it is a debate section.

Organization

As previously mentioned, the article is well structured and clearly presented. I do not see any major grammar or spelling issues. Nonetheless, I would recommend looking in more detail.

Images and Media

The neuroscience section provides helpful images that allow readers to comprehend the section better. Although images are not essential, I believe this article could possible benefit from more images. I would try to look for an image for the lead section.

All in all, the comments in the sandbox would greatly benefit the article.