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Article title: Health The article explored a broad range of components that influence the meaning of health. I believe the article was very thorough and came from a neutral point of view. Most of the links I clicked on were from a published book. After reading through the article's talk page, the only conversation posted had to do with the topic of health promotion not solely being a nursing specific activity. I do agree with this input because nurses are only a part of the entire group that promote health which also includes doctors, health promotion officers, public health officers and many more. This article is a part of WikiProject Medicine and Wikiproject Nursing.

AIDS EPIDEMIC: DEREK JARMAN
MAYBE ADD: The Wikipedia page states "In 1989, Jarman's film War Requiem brought Laurence Olivier out of retirement for what would be Olivier's last screen performance." Unlike the other films, the "War Requiem" has no background. The 1989 War Requiem (film) was a cinematic adaptation of composer Benjamin Britten's musical piece [1].

The Wikipedia pages does include that Derek Jarman was a author, however it does not include any information on the books. The book "Derek Jarman's Gardaen" is a personal account on how his garden evolved from 1989 until his death in 1994. I also noticed that his beautiful garden was a direct contrast to its location, a nuclear plant. Jarman was able to produce a lively beautiful garden in the most inhospitable place. I think this is very important to include this because his garden paralleled his life in a way, especially the struggles he faced with AIDS [2].


 * Since he was an author of several books, I think there should be a separate list titled books instead of them being mentioned under other works.
 * I also think each book should be discussed a little because the books don't have their own Wikipedia page. So the only description of the books is coming directly from any website that is selling them.
 * Modern Nature and Smiling in Slow Motion, were important pieces and I think there should be a description in his Wikipedia page[3/4].
 * I noticed his own autobiography is overlooked, and I think there should be a focus on it because it can provided better insight into his life that maybe wasn't shown in the films.

"Dancing Ledge: Derek Jarman"- This autobiography (printed in 1984) details his life until the age 40. It is written in a journal style, and provides his own insight on the history of gay life in London (60's-80's) He details his own progression from artist to filmmaker. I think a summary of this should be included in his page because he discusses the creation of 4 prominent films (Sebastiane, Jubilee, The Tempest,and Caravaggio)
 * Also includes acceptance of his homosexuality at age 16 and accounts of the financial/emotional hardships of a life devoted to filmmaking.

BIBLIOGRAPHY: 1. Cooke, Mervyn. Britten: War Requiem. Cambridge Univ. Press, 2005. 2. Jarman, Derek, and Howard Sooley. Derek Jarmans Garten. Berlin: Verl. Volk Und Welt, 1996. Print. 3. Jarman, Derek. Modern Nature. Woodstock (N.Y.): Overlook, 1994. Print. 4. Jarman, Derek. Smiling in Slow Motion. Minneapolis: Minn., 1989. Print. 5. Jarman, Derek, and Shaun Allen. Dancing Ledge. Minneapolis: Minn., 2010. Print.

Chinese Consolidated Benevolent Association
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 * 1) I think its important to include how the transfer of the Huiguan tradition into the United States of America directly influenced the development of the Six Companies. When the Cantonese merchants immigrated they brought along their huiguan traditions and formed native-place associations that: provided assistance in lodging & storage for baggage, helped find jobs, provided self defense/ mutual aid, and helped care for the sick/dead.
 * 2) The article simply named the Six Companies, I think we should add the order in which the huiguan's were established and the different districts they include and possibly where they had their branches. For example something along the lines of- In 1851 the second huiguan, also know as Sam Yap, was established and it included 5 districts- Nanhai, Panyu, Shunde, Sanshui, and Xingyun.
 * 3) The article does not include the positive aspects the six companies brought to San Francisco. For Example, The development of the six companies, was an important reason why the sick and needy Chinese never became a burden to San Francisco and the treasury of the state. Thee native-place organizations saved the Chinese in this new country much expense and trouble. The existing anti-Chinese sentiment and violence, created by the fast growing Chinese immigration made joining a huiguan almost impossible that's why they became to prominent in San Francisco.

Bibliography:
 * Chang, I. (2003). The Chinese in America: a narrative history. New York: Viking.
 * Qin, Yucheng. The Diplomacy of Nationalism: the Six Companies and China's Policy toward Exclusion. University of Hawaii Press, 2009.

DRAFT: Chinese Consolidated Benevolent Association:

I would like to help improve the article by adding a section of how the six companies came into existence in the United States, like a brief history.

Along with Chinese migration to the United states, came new traditions and customs. The establishment of the most prominent support organization for Chinese immigrants were deeply rooted in the huiguan tradition. These organizations were formed on the basis of native-place associations. In 1851 the first huiguan, the Kong Chow Company emerged seeing that the majority of Chinese already settled in California were connected to six districts collectively called Gangzhou. The second huiguan, know as the Sam Yap Company was established in 1851 and was comprised of five districts: Nanhai, Panyu, Shunde, Sanshui, and Xingyun. Towards the end of 1851, the third huiguan, the Sze Yap Company was formed and it consisted of four districts: Xinhui, Kaiping, Xinning, and Enpig. In 1852, the Yeong Wo Company was established and it included the three districts: Heung-shan, Tung-kun, and Tsang-shing. Within the same year the Hip Kat company appeared and was comprised of Hakka immigrants from four districts: Bow On, Chak Tai, Tung Gwoon and Chu Mui. The Sze Yap company later divided and the Ning Yeung company emerged.