User:Alohr77/Vladimir Golenishchev/Chancewilber1 Peer Review

General info
Alohr77
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Alohr77/Vladimir Golenishchev - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Vladimir Golenishchev - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
One of the first things that I see straight out of the gate is that this editor does a great job at finding information on Vladimir Golenishchev's life. It looks like the original article didn't have much to say about the early life of Vladimir, and what the article had to say didn't have the details that the editor added. Something that is also very impressing to me is that the editor was able to put information in this article that flowed smoothly with the article while there are lots of difficult words to find ways to make them flow smoothly.

The first thing that I see that can be changed to this article is the Lead section. The Lead section is very short and sweet which is what the section is supposed to be like, but I think you could add a couple of his accomplishments to the Lead section. I think if someone reads about his accomplishments, they will become intrigued and want to learn more about what he did to gain these accomplishments. The Lead section is really the only section that I can see that needs a little bit of restructuring. If you were to make this improvement to your article, I believe that it will flow a lot smoother and spark the readers interest to learn more about Vladimir Golenishchev. I think the rest of these edits are very crucial edits and well put together.

There is one thing that stood out to me throughout this article that was the most consistent that I think needs work. I may be wrong, but I am pretty sure whenever you add information that was given to you from a source you need to add the citation at the end of the sentence. I know Dr. Sheppard said at the beginning of this Wikipedia assignment that almost every sentence should have the citation after it back to the article that you are referring to. You added citations to the beginning of the article when you were talking about Vladimir's life, but after that first section the rest of your edits do not have citations after them. As I stated before I may be wrong; however, I do believe that anytime you refer back to an article whether it's in your own words or not you need to have the correct citations at the end.

In my article that I am editing I am attempting to restructure the Body section because they have all their achievements under the section titled "Science." I really like how you did a similar format with how I structured my article, but I didn't add the little bits about what is going to happen in that section. After going through your sandbox, I now will know that I need to go back and break up the paragraphs I plan on breaking up and put labels with what I plan on adding to the sections.

All in all, these are wonderful revisions that you have made to this article and the information you have added are crucial points that i believe will help make this article as great as it can be. Keep up the great work!!