User:AloofCanine72/How Human Infrastructure Impacts Birds’ Ecosystem/EstherM04 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AloofCanine72, J-smoothe06, SomeoneAverage


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AloofCanine72/How_Human_Infrastructure_Impacts_Birds%E2%80%99_Ecosystem?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The article needs a good introductory sentence that is able to describe the topic of the article. The introduction is well-written but only talks about building collisions and not the aspects of the whole article.

More can be talked about in the lead section other than just light pollution, like height of buildings, etc

Content

The content is well written and easy to read.

The content is neutral.

The content is unbiased and also talks about birds deaths relating to human infrastructure.

The information is followed up by reliable sources.

The sources are relatively current and are from a variety of sources

It is concise, well organized and does not have any spelling errors. I think you could talk more about how the information for collision deaths are being recorded. The proportions of birds dying in the population in addition to the numbers added to make a connection to demographics. A comparison of bird deaths living in areas without as much building collisions and light pollution could be a good comparison.

There needs to be images added to enhance the information.

The article could use more information regarding the topic. A conclusion section could be added to summarize all the information on the page.

Overall Impressions

I think the article is nicely written and can be expanded upon if possible. I feel like the article is interesting and raises awareness on this issue. A good introduction and conclusion along with images would make the article better.