User:Alopr12/Artificial heart/Kimjammer Peer Review

General info
Alopr12
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Alopr12/Artificial heart
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Artificial heart

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

I think there's a lot of room for the existing lead section in the article to be improved, so you might consider looking into it. Specifically, it feels like the existing lead section only talking about the very first artificial hearts and then mostly what an artificial hear is not, which isn't ideal. There's potential here for it to include a more general overview of the entire article.


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

I like your addition of new developments of the artificial hearts to the article. Biomedical technology is always evolving and it's great to see new up to date information and developments get added.


 * Is the content added neutral?

Your article feels neutral and not for or against any viewpoint, which is good.


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?

It's great to see reliable sources for your claims. However, you might have noticed that direct quotations are very rare on Wikipedia, especially from secondary sources like the encyclopedia Britannica quotation. I would suggest removing the direct quotation and directly writing your claim in your own words, with the footnote at the end. I think this also applies to your suggested edit at for the lead - direct quotations should only be used if the quoted words are significant in and of themselves, and not for the ideas they contain.


 * Are the sources current?

Yes, the sources are extremely recent, as both were published in 2023. That's awesome!


 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Yes! When you're converting your citations into the Wikipedia format, note that you should leave out the "#:~text=..." section from the second source. It's just extra data that let's your browser jump exactly to where you copied from, and it's not actually part of the URL.


 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

No.