User:Alsurafel/Personality psychology/Willysandals Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alsurafel


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alsurafel/Personality_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Personality psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Might I preface with saying, this is a very interesting article. Seems like a great choice and it's already got a lot of very informative and interesting information. I'll be excited to see how you continue to develop it.

The inclusion of those two new references does build the strength of the individual statements being proclaimed between the parts about "objective testing" and "twin studies". It's very impressive to find such specific areas to develop more strength and reliability in.

I found that the addition of differences found in those who score differently in trait openness and conscientiousness was really interesting and a great way to add onto that paragraph. I think it leaves a lot of opportunity to develop on those differences and character traits more, though. Furthermore, I think there could be something added to smooth out the transition between "Lastly, those who score high in trait conscientiousness are more organized and punctual" and "Identical twins, however, have higher correlations in personality traits than fraternal twins. One study measuring genetic influence on twins in five different countries found that the correlations for identical twins were .50, while for fraternal they were about .20. It is suggested that heredity and environment interact to determine one's personality". While there is an obvious correlation between the sentences and how they exist within this paragraph together, it feels like an abrupt change and I think there could be a better transition added to it.

What you have added so far has been interesting and significant to what this article has offered; however, I am looking forward to seeing where else you can make interesting additions throughout this article, as there hasn't been a whole lot added.

Keep up the great work!