User:Alternativenonfacist/Security theater/FlareNight Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing the user User: Alternativenonfacist
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to the draft you're reviewing
 * The draft I am reviewing is User:Alternativenonfacist/Security theater
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The current version of the article is this Security theater:

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that it is good that you expanded under the Disadvantages header as it was in dire need of it. However, I do think that you might want a lead section in the beginning to introduce the topic as a whole. Another area in which you might be able to expand is benefits, even though it is probably against your nature to do so, the segment does seem like it could use some more information. Additionally, you could also add one or two photos to the article, although I know finding non-copyrighted images may be a challenge, I know it was for me, I think it would help it aesthetically and would allow you to pull in visual examples.

On another note, I noticed one "citation needed" spot that should be filled in or removed. I don't know if you have this edit in your sandbox or not, but I thought I should point this out.

I think your overall contribution to the article is well done. As we talked about, it is hard to cut biases out of an article like this, however, I think you did a good job at maintaining a neutral tone. Most of the suggestions I mention above are minor, the major one being fixing the "citation needed" source. That's all, good work :). (You could also rearrange some of the information, but I think you already talked about that in class, so I see no need to get picky on this point. )