User:Alwayh/Fly Biting/MarsAtlantica Peer Review

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Alwayh


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 * User:Alwayh/Fly Biting


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This article is really good, especially considering that it is brand new. The first few sentences of the lead are excellent, however, most of the specific detail oriented content would be better suited in its own section beneath the lead. The content present on the page is all relevant to the article, well-sourced and appears to be up to date. The major thing would be to have a section above the speculated causes and below the lead containing some of the information in the lead labeled "description" or a similar word. The tone of the article is neutral which is always good. Organizationally the article is easy to read and the information is presented in what seems to be a logical order. The description comes before the speculated causes which comes before the treatment. Again the major thing would be to shift some of the information in the lead down to a description section. Another improvement that could be made is the inclusion of one or two more images (given the current size of the article) as they always make articles more pleasant to read and help with understanding the content. A short video clip or image of the behaviour would be very nice. As a new article this is a notable phenomenon which does not presently have an article which a good list of sources. I'd say this article is well on the way to being a valuable contribution that others can add onto. Overall this is an excellent article so far.