User:Alwayh/Fly Biting/SwallowInTheTrees Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alwayh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alwayh/Fly_Biting?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Does not exist

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article is excellent actually. I think the amount of information presented is adequate and appropriate for Wikipedia. The tone is good, the sentences are clear and the sections are concise. I think the article needs to exist. A quick google search proves that this phenomena is notable, there just isn't a Wikipedia page on it yet. This is a very good start to an article that others can build on. I think it would benefit from more recent sources, but for what you have so far I believe your references are adequate.

There are a couple of nitpicks that I imagine you're going to address in the final version of the article, but regardless, here they are:

-If the article as a whole was bigger, there is some stuff in the intro that should probably go under a "Characteristics" section or something like it. However, as the article stands, the lead section works well.

-Use American spelling for stuff like behavior (as opposed to behaviour like you've written). I don't like it either, but Wikipedia does it that way and I think standardization is good in general.

-Link to other Wikipedia articles whenever you have things that have articles of their own (I also didn't do this in my draft, I'm just putting it here in case).

-Maybe I see Wikipedia as an encyclopedia more than I should, but I find phrases like "one study found" shouldn't be used on Wikipedia. I know it's something we do a lot in the sciences, I just find that it doesn't fit. These articles should be a synthesis, not necessarily a repertoire of studies and individual findings. I know you only do this like once, but I figured I'd include it because I really don't have much else to say about your article.

-If you could find one that is free use and to the point, I think a short video clip would help the article a lot, but it is not necessary by any means.

Again, this article is good.