User:Alyssadebragga/Original Starbucks/Bellamrome Peer Review

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Alyssadebragga
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Sandbox draft of Original Starbucks
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Original Starbucks

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Lead: I think this article started out fairly well with the lead section. It gives a gist of information about you are potentially going to talk about for the rest of the article. Something I think that can help is the flow of the sentences, for example: "It has kept its early appearance over time, and while it carries great significance, it also is known for..." and so on. I think something like this could just add to a smooth flow throughout the article.

Content/References: Something that others might catch as well is where the information came from, just being mindful of giving credit to those sources of information, like where the information of the square footage came from as well as the historic detailing. I like your starting structure however, talking about the history and how it came to be and the historic detailing. Here is also an article about the logo if it seems relevant enough to add. *Just extra information as well, you mentioned it opened March 30th but of what year?*

Tone: While I mentioned I did like the starting structure, I think "nowadays" can be replaced with something similar to or along the lines of "current Starbucks locations". However, I did like the tone of the 3rd paragraph as it all seemed to flow smoothly and stayed around the central historic features of the building. There also does not seem to be any biases or one sided information as well.

Organization: Something that can be useful to readers as well is headings or subheadings in addition to the information added. I feel like the article is/will be history-based since it was the first Starbucks. but they can make reading it a little easier as well to find specific information and can add to the article as a whole. I noticed you talked about the history, so maybe that can be placed into a section? Here's an article as well that I came across from the Starbucks archives for some additional information about how Starbucks got it's name that could be useful.

Images: I think the outside image of the building is very captivating and perfect for the article. However, the second image of the barista I think could be repositioned or added under a different heading as it seems almost a little on it's own in the original live article.

Overall, I think this article is looking really good and information! With just a few adjustments and some added content, I think this article would be very interesting and fun to read, especially since we are so close to the location! Something last minute that came up is I heard sometimes the Starbucks Reserve hosts tours I'm not sure if that is entirely true or connected but something that maybe can be checked or added with an "activities" or "extras" heading, or even added into the "see also" external section.