User:Alyssadebragga/Original Starbucks/Charityjoyn Peer Review

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Lead
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 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? I am not sure if there is a lead in your current sandbox. There is a lead section, but the paragraph starts under "Article body". However, I think the first few lines of your article body is a good introduction to the topic. It gives readers a lot of context about the origins of the store and what it is like now.

Content
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 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? The content you added is relevant to the topic. You added more information about when it specifically started and the conditions it was in when it first opened. I think it would be helpful if you included the year it opened along with the date. You mentioned it on the top, but it would be easier for users to follow if you add the year after the date again.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? I am not sure if it is up-to-date, since I do not really see the sources of the information you are putting in. This can be helpful to include so readers can know what to expect if they visit the store today.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? Although this article only focuses on the Original Starbucks (not the Starbucks chain), I think it will be useful to include the founders and who opened the first Starbucks store. I think adding sub-sections to this article can also help it flow better. For example, highlighting a "History" section to talk about how it originated, the founders, and what it looked like back then. This can also progress to a section on how it has evolved since then and is now a tourist attraction. I think it would also be interesting to explore the store's popularity and and growth that turned that store into the multinational company we know today.

Tone and Balance
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 * Is the content added neutral? The tone of this article is neutral. I don't think the article is biased, as it only provides information of the store and its features to the reader.

Sources and References
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 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? I am not seeing a lot of sources to the information you have added to the article. I think it would be useful if you added a mix of sources from people who were around when the store first opened and new sources that provides information on the growth of the store.

Organization
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 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? The content is well-written. The new information is clear, relevant to the topic and easy to read.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? As mentioned in the previous paragraphs of feedback, I think breaking down the body of the article into different sections will make the article easier to follow for readers. This will also be helpful if you decide to include more information about the founders, the growth, and the community behind the original Starbucks stole. It will be easier for audiences to read and find specific information they want to know about the topic.

Overall impressions
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 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Overall, you have put useful information and it added a lot to the original article. I think expanding more on the background of the store, the community, and its growth would be really interesting, since Starbucks has grown so much since then. It would be interesting to read about how this store turned into the huge success it is now.