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Cognitive Development[edit]
My article is on Cognitive Development. It is a start class rated article and and it is rated as high importance. It is part of the Wiki Project psychology and Wiki Project cognitive science. I think everything in the article is relevant to the topic. However, I think the article contains too much about Piaget's theory of cognitive development and not enough about other theorists research on cognitive development such as Kohlberg and Vygotsky. A majority of the article is about Piaget, which is unnecessary because "Piaget's theory of cognitive development" is already its own Wikipedia article. I think the article needs much more information of the other theorists involved in cognitive development. I think the article could use a lot more sources. There are some parts of the article that have 6 or 7 paragraphs in a row with no sources. The article also has quite a few sources that are extremely out of date. I think they could be replaced with new and better sources. The article could use a lot more information on certain topics such as zone of proximal development. I also think the article could be organized better. The main topics and subtopics are very confusing to follow and it is not very clear how each subtopic ties into the overall point of cognitive development.

Paraphrase[edit]
Lev Vygtosky's theory is based on social learning as the most important aspect of cognitive development. Unlike Piaget, he believed that learning comes before development and that one must learn first to be able to develop into an adult. Vygtosky's theory is different from Piaget's in four ways. 1. Vygotsky believes culture affects cognitive development more. Vygotsky has no stages like Piaget does. Piaget thinks that cognitive development is the same across the world, while Vygotsky has the idea that culture makes cognitive development different. 2. Social factors heavily influence cognitive development under Vygotsky's beliefs. Environment and parents the child has will play a big role in a child's cognitive development. The child learns through the Zone of Proximal Development with help from their parent. 3. Vygotsky believes that language is important in cognitive development. While Piaget saw considers thought as an important role, Vygotsky sees thought and language as different, but eventually coming together.  He Vygotsky emphasizes the role of inner speech being the first thing to cause cognitive development to form. 4. Cognitive development is very influenced by adults. Children observe adults in their life and gain knowledge about the culture based on things the adults do ['''How different this different from the second point "social factors"? Please elaborate on it.''' ].

Wenqi's Feedback
Your additions are important. In the Wiki article about cognitive development, you can add a new section as "Lev Vygtosky's theory" below the section "Other theoretical perspectives on cognitive development".

I made some revision suggestions. Please see the above bold part.

Mukandoli's feedback
Overall your articles seems really good, your article seems  nice to flow. I think you should add more sources to be more specific and get more information. your paraphrasing looks good, I like how you wrote everything in your own word and include different structures of cognitive development.

Lev Vygotsky vs. Jean Piaget
Unlike Piaget, who believed development comes before learning, Vygotsky believed that learning comes before development and that one must learn first to be able to develop into a functioning human being. Vygotsky's theory is different from Piaget's in four ways. 1. Vygotsky believes culture affects cognitive development more. Piaget thinks that cognitive development is the same across the world, while Vygotsky has the idea that culture makes cognitive development different. 2. Social factors heavily influence cognitive development under Vygotsky's beliefs. Environment and parents the child has will play a big role in a child's cognitive development. The child learns through the Zone of Proximal Development with help from their parent. 3. Vygotsky believes that language is important in cognitive development. While Piaget considers thought as an important role, Vygotsky sees thought and language as different, but eventually coming together. Vygotsky emphasizes the role of inner speech being the first thing to cause cognitive development to form. 4. Cognitive development is very influenced by adults. Children observe adults in their life and gain knowledge about their specific culture based on things the adults around them do. They do this through mediation and scaffolding.

Lev Vygotsky's theory
Lev Vygotsky's (1896-1934) theory is based on social learning as the most important aspect of cognitive development. In Vygotsky's theory, adults are very important for young children's development. They help children learn through mediation, which is modeling and explaining concepts. Together, adults and children master concepts of their culture and activities. Vygotsky believed we get our complex mental activities through social learning. A significant part of Vygotsky's theory is based on the zone of proximal development, which he believes is when the most effective learning takes place. The zone of proximal development is what a child cannot accomplish alone but can accomplish with the help of an MKO (more knowledgeable other). Vygotsky also believed culture is a very important part of cognitive development such as the language, writing and counting system used in that culture. Another aspect of Vygotsky’ theory is private speech. Private speech is when a person talks to themselves in order to help themselves problem solve. Scaffolding or providing support to a child and then slowly removing support and allowing the child to do more on their own over time is also an aspect of Vygotsky’s theory.