User:Am0ria1/Homelessness in California/Angiesyz Peer Review

General info
Am0ria1
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Am0ria1/Homelessness_in_California?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Homelessness in California

Evaluate the drafted changes
Here are my personal suggestions:


 * 1) For citation, make sure you are clearly citing each sentences (can be repeated), using the " button, not the  link button. Overall, I recommend a combination of embedded link and citation after sentences.
 * 2) You stated that Sacramento County has established several project, it would be great if you can list their name with their official websites attached; to provide a direction for future editors.
 * 3) For first three paragraphs, it would be more informative if some statistic are present, for example, the amount of money invested, the number of individuals subsidized, anything reflecting the effectiveness of the project; referring to the SF section as an example.
 * 4) For "sacramento steps forwards" and "Integrating Care for People Experiencing Homelessness": I know this is only the first draft and I am not sure your expection for this section, the only suggestion I have is to cut some repetitive words, and find a good way to integrate it into the whole wiki page.
 * 5) For the topic of homelessness, I recently learned about the intervention of "housing first (HF)" which emphasis a combination of housing, mental health and harm reduction because mental illness and addiction is associating with being homeless. I think it could be more comprehensive to briefly depict the intersectionality of drug use, mental health and homelessness; or simply the prevalence of having all 3; to address underrepresented populations.
 * 6) The new approach should be integrated into the body paragraphs.
 * 7) Citing with multiple sources if possible.
 * 8) One point I think could be biased toward a particular position: I am not an expert on this topic but I think the reasons of homelessness is multi-faceted, not only "insufficient amount of affordable housing" and "remarkable increase of rent;" maybe stating the rise of homelessness are mainly contributed by these two reasons or listing other factors?
 * 9) The content added is relevant to the topic and up-to-date.
 * 10) The content is well-written and well-organized, concise, and easy to follow.
 * 11) No grammatical or spelling error (don't forget to fix the capitalization for one of the subtitles)

Great job! Enjoy reading your work :)