User:Amandaaaaam/Black feminism/Courtalbanese Peer Review

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User:Amandaaaaam
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Amandaaaaam/Black feminism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Black feminism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Amanda! I really liked your article and appreciated the edits you made overall! Good job!

Lead
It looks like under the lead section, you are removing irrelevant sentences and adding clarity to the article. Looks good!

Content
Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic? :

Yes! I think your inclusion of the Combahee River Collective, Audre Lorde, and Kimberle Crenshaw, as well as the other organizations/people you listed are incredibly relevant to the topic of Black feminism. I think that by adding them and their specific works, you are greatly improving the article, as you add some theorists/feminists that were absolutely integral to the shaping of Black feminist theory.

Is the content added up-to-date? :

Yes. Though I think many of your additions focus on the rise of Black feminism and its contributors throughout the 1970s/1980s, I think that the groups/people you added to the article are incredibly relevant and integral to the shaping of Black feminism and its history.

Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?:

I think there should be more of an introduction into the "Black Feminist Literature" part of the article, as it seems to be a short, specific paragraph before jumping into a long list of seemingly disconnected examples. (Also maybe introducing it as theory as well as literature, as many of the examples were integral to the shaping of the conceptualization of Black feminism as well) Perhaps a short introduction on the formation of Black feminist literature, or an explanation on what separates it from white feminist literature in its content, style, or prose could add some context to the rest of the section. I also definitely agree with your note that the organization of the examples under the literature heading is wordy and hard to understand from a reader's perspective. Maybe putting these into paragraphs organized by year/central theme instead of a simple bulleted list could help?

Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?:

I think this article addresses one of the most historically underrepresented populations and gives perspective, history, and insight into Black feminist movements. I think your addition of more organizations and individual feminists allows for a broader perspective into Black feminism and greater diversity of thought.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:

Is the content added neutral?:

I think you did a great job keeping a neutral and formal tone in your writings, while still adding valuable (and inherently political) information.

Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?:

no

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?:

Not that I can notice, though I will admit I am not a scholar in the field of black feminism.

Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?:

no, the article remains very neutral with your additions.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?:

Yes. It looks like you have cited all of the feminist theory books you mention in the importance of identity list as well as the direct activism list.

Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.):

Yes. You sum up the concepts of most of the feminist theory incredibly well in a short sentence for each of your examples. For your other sources, you are reporting facts/dates, and are accurate in those.

Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?:

Yes, though many of them are just examples of literature written by individual black feminists. I would possibly add a few more articles/journals on the topic to fill out your knowledge/edit.

Are the sources current?: Yes.

Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?:

Diversity is almost inherently tied to the concept of Black feminism, so yes.

Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.):

I don't think I can find "better" sources- the ones you cite are relevant and well-researched.

Check a few links. Do they work?: Yes

Organization
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Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?

Yes! I think your paragraph on the National Welfare Rights Organization could use a little more depth/clarity, though. You write, "ADC has received critiques."- what is the ADC? Who was critiquing them and for what reasons? It is just a little unclear as the reader what you are referring to- possibly adding links to other Wikipedia articles in this section could help with that. You could also explain what midnight raids are, as many readers possibly aren't familiar with them. Also in this section, you mention Johnnie Tillmon as a critic of the ADC, but don't really explain who Johnnie Tillmon was. Maybe you could write, "In a Ms. Magazine article from [insert year/issue number], Black feminist and author Johnnie Tillmon critiques the ADC because...". Other than this specific section, though, I think your writing is really understandable and clear!

Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?

I didn't notice any grammar or spelling errors, just a few awkward sentences. Before you post this, maybe read your sentences out loud and get a feel for the flow and pacing of the paragraphs.

Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic

I think for the most part it is well organized. I agree with your note that the Black Feminist Literature section needs a little help with the formatting, maybe the erasing/moving of the importance of identity section to include authors/works that focus specifically on identity politics.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?

I definitely think the article is more complete with your additions. Adding to the organizations section of the article adds perspective and complexity to understanding of Black feminist groups- I would add the other two groups (National Association of Colored Women (NACW) and National Council of Negro Women (NCNW)) as well, with a short statement on their founding, years, and main missions. I think your additions to the feminist literature section are incredibly valuable as well, as thinkers like Audre Lorde, Kimberle Crenshaw, and Angela Davis were incredibly integral to the formation of Black feminist thought.

What are the strengths of the content added?

I think your primary strength in the content you added is the relevance and importance of the people and organizations you list. You add people/theorists/organizations that were historically very important in developing the concept of Black feminism within the second wave (70s-80s)

How can the content added be improved?

As I said above, I think your writing can mostly be improved by going through and editing sentences to flow more/be a little less clunky in their phrasing. Also, I think it would benefit the article to add more of an introduction section going into the feminist literature section of the article, and give more historical context in the formation of Black feminist theory and identity politics before providing specific examples like the article currently does.

Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources?


 * Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list? If not, can you think of anything we've read that might be useful for them?

Yes and yes- you cite a couple journal articles/books, and the Ms Magazine article we read for class, along with many specific books written by Black feminist thinkers. Your sources are well-rounded and comprehensive.

Does the topic link in some way to our course material?

Yes- I think the rise of Black feminism ties to our class's discussion on domesticity and alternate perspectives surrounding 20th century domesticity. Black feminists questioned the roles of Black women within their community, as well as society as a whole through the time period you added to (mostly the 1970s).

Does your peer add historical context to their article?

I don't think you add broader context to the article, which I think has a rather robust historical section already- instead, you add specific groups, organizations, and feminists that offer different perspectives and also have their own roles in history. For example, you added Kimberle Crenshaw's 1989 Demarginalizing the Intersection of Race and Sex, which has since had a massive effect on the world of feminist studies for its coining of the term intersectionality.

Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?

I think the only thing that could be added further would just be more examples of organizations and authors, but I do not know enough about the history of Black feminism to offer any specific suggestions. I think what you have added has been very detailed and good!