User:Amandageorgiagomes/Yellow mongoose/Tatijohnson1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

amandageorgiagomes


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Amandageorgiagomes/Yellow_mongoose?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yellow mongoose

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead paragraph of the "Yellow Mongoose" article was not specifically edited in this particular sandbox draft. However, in the original article, the lead paragraph highlights the scientific term for the species, the family to which they belong, common range of height, weight and length, alongside their common geographical setting and favourable conditions. in this particular paragraph, edits could allow for a brief elaboration on their historical discovery and or importance, the basic evolution of this species, and so forth. in the case that this addition is not ideal for the leading paragraph of this article, this information could be placed in the taxonomy sub-category or an entirely new section of this article could be implemented in order to highlight the given information.

Content:

In the characteristics portion of this article edit, the addition of information regarding differences in sizes across the various subspecies of mongoose's as well as genders allows was an ideal addition. This information can allow the readers to not only acknowledge the influence that external factors such as climate, region and resources have on altering the physical appearances of this species. in addition, by reiterating that size differences are not common between the female and male yellow mongoose's illustrates an uncommon trend as many other species whether mongoose or any organism will typically see drastic differences between male and female animals with regards to size.

The behaviour an ecology sub-category effectively highlights the feeding patterns, favourable habitats, mechanisms of transportation or migration and the common daily activity that yellow mongoose's adhere to. The drafted edit in particular was able to further emphasize the social aspect of this sub-species whilst acknowledging the differences in hunting or feeding habits as opposed to their shared living experiences. in this paragraph, information regarding the yellow mongoose's adaptational techniques in terms of hunting was briefly mentioned, however, the evolutionary aspect of their adaptation tactics was not highlighted. for example, besides hunting, this subspecies has been able to evolve through different colour ranges, and sizes based on their geographical settings. the potential to research the specifics regarding how, when and why these adaptations have occurred could allow for this article to become slightly more informative.

In evaluating the yellow mongoose's social structure, this sector of the article was not added to in particular. However, it could be further advanced by elaborating on how the hierarchical aspect of their colonies are maintained outside of territorial markings. Similar to that of the predators sub category which this edit draft did not add any further information to, the biological aspect of their anal secretions and the physiological effects this form of self protection may have on the species could enhance the sub-category. Another aspect that may further enhance this sub-category could be elaborating on how other species or the same species interpret the tail movements as a form of communication.

Following the reproduction and Rabies sub-categories, this edit draft included information on the IUCN, geographic range, extinction and threat data, urbanization effects and habitual benefits (burrows and shrubs). these various additions were not only directly related to the topic of the Yellow Mongoose but also provided an exceptional amount of information that was not acknowledged by the original author.

Tone and Balance:

in evaluating the neutrality of the tone, it is evident that the additions made to this article were written in an unbiased and neutral manner. for example, the evaluation of the activities taken by the IUCN gives rise to an international and inclusive viewpoint which acknowledge the lack of threat currently placed on this subspecies. this illustrates neutrality as the information given was not restricted to a particular country and or setting.

Sources and References:

The sources and references used to generate and add new information to the original article were more or less reliable. each source listed was either a peer reviewed journal article entry or a reviewed web retrieval. in addition, a majority of the sources used were also current or within the ideal timeline to be sourced as accurate and recent information.

Organization:

although some sections of the original article were not edited, this draft provided several new paragraphs with information that was not previously highlighted by the original author. with that being said, it is evident that the structure and organization of the article (I.e., placing population statistics, environmental trends and politics and geographical factors alongside one another) were deeply considered.

Images and Media:

No images were added to the edited article, however, images from the original article were used again in the draft edit.

Overall Impressions:

Generally speaking, the content added to this article drastically improved the original draft. Easily, the information provided not only emphasized the information previously given but also worked to give further insight on topics that were not mentioned in the original draft. The draft was complete, concise and highly informative. well done.