User:AmaniSensei/NMAC 3108 Journal4

June 8, 2019: Fourth Journal
For this journal entry I choose to review The Cannonball House. On the surface level this article seems to pass the eye test. The article appears to be very neutral in all aspects. The information was very dense and concise. The article passed everything according to what was on Niklas Göke, “How to Edit Your Writing in Three Passes.” One thing important thing to note is that the article did include visuals. The colors were not very extravagant so it did not distract the audience. In fact, it is essential to include a if you are referring to a particular location. On the other hand, the article failed to mention that some of the antiques and furniture were donated from neighboring cities. The article made it seem as if everything inside of the Cannonball House was authentic to Macon,GA but in all actually it was not. I am not sure when the Weber square grand piano was added, but it is authentic to Governor’s Mansion in Milledgeville. Furthermore, all the facts were very solid. Most of the information surrounding The Cannonball House can be found on the Cannonball Website. It is also linked in the archive. Lastly, I would recommend that the article include information from the local press during that time period, testimonials, and court records to verify how the Cannonball house received it's name, and other important implications. The article did include a link to the Civil War, but after a thorough check of the link no where in the article mention Cannonball House. Although, I have no reason to suspect that this information is false, because the information is verified on the Cannonball Website. It wouldn't have hurt if there was another credible source to back up this sources's information. Overall, the article had great and accurate content. The layout was fabulous. It was short and to the point.