User:Amara008/African-American hair/Elizabethainslie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amara008


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Amara008/African-American_hair?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * African-American hair
 * African-American hair

Evaluate the drafted changes
 Lead 


 * The Lead has been updated to reflect the new content added.
 * Greater emphasis has been placed on the importance and connection between African-American hairstyles and black culture in the United States.
 * Further important detail is provided into types of hair texture.
 * The Lead sentence is concise and clear, easily identifies the subject and significance.
 * The Lead is missing a brief description of the articles major sections.

Overall, the Lead is engaging, and concise, only providing information that is present further into the article. All that is missing is a descriptive sentence highlighting the articles major sections.

 Content 


 * All of the content currently added is relevant to the topic, and discusses important aspects of this topic.
 * Further sections could be added which discuss things such as: African-American hairstyles over the years, Examples of popular African-American hairstyles, cultural appropriation and African-American hairstyles.
 * All of the content added is still socially relevant, however resources from more recent years should be included.
 * This particular topic is significant as it addresses a historically underrepresented population and topic which is often overlooked.

The content added is relevant and educational. The addition of further section relating to this topic would be beneficial and help readers to grasp the depth of this topic.

 Tone and Balance 


 * All added content is written in a neutral and factual tone.
 * While the article touches on some controversial topics, the writing remains unbiased.
 * The article is non persuasive, and written with intent to educate and inform.

 Sources and References 


 * All new content added is backed up by secondary sources.
 * Additional sources must be included, 2 is insufficient.
 * There is a lack of quality in terms of sources, greater addition of peer-reviewed sources is needed.
 * All added content accurately reflects what the sources say.
 * One of the sections in the article (Popular Culture) has been flagged, as possibly containing original research, this must be remedied.
 * All links included are functional.
 * Authors of sources reflect diversity, and are predominantly Black, which is necessary for this particular topic.

 Organization 


 * The added content is all well written, very concise and easy to read and understand.
 * There are no apparent grammatical errors.
 * The content of the article should be better organized, the article doesn't flow in a logical order. Consider doing it chronologically or following the 5 W's.

 Images and Media 


 * The article needs more images. Especially for a topic such as this, images would greatly enhance the understanding and appreciation of this topic.

 Overall Impressions 


 * All added content has greatly improved the overall quality of the article.
 * The additional information is better written and more detailed.
 * The strengths of the added content is that it enhances comprehension of the topic, and includes greater real-life references to relate to.
 * The added content could be improved by offering even greater detail and delving further into the significance and global impacts of this topic.