User:Amarq030/Cradle of Humankind/Acont061 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amarq030


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Amarq030/Cradle of Humankind
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cradle of Humankind

Evaluate the drafted changes
When looking over the user's bibliography, I noted that many were just links to sources. When citing scholarly sources, it is important to follow proper citation formatting guidelines, so as to ensure the source is credible and can also be tracked down. Therefore, I would advise the user to reformat their bibliography so that it fits a recognized formatting guideline (MLA, APA, etc.).

In regards to the source's Sandbox Draft, I think the user does a really nice job at presenting information in a neutral way. It is evident that everything they have composed has been properly researched and does an adequate job at expanding on the information presented in the original article. One suggestion I would have is that the author consider adding a few transitional sentences within their article. By doing so, their section would be a lot easier to follow. As it stands now, there are a lot of dates and information being presented. The addition of transitions would allow readers to better follow all of the new information.

I also am impressed at how the user pointed out a small lack of organization, as well as a spelling error within the original article. This proves that they have carefully read the existing article and were quite vigilant in their review and edits.