User:Ambedia/Healthcare in Mexico/Brian S Liu Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * Ambedia
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:Ambedia/Healthcare in Mexico

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
I really like the overall coverage of many things! It gives me a good idea of the topic.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
"are the main factors" in the sentence in the first paragraph "Factors such as ... associated with this" seems like a borderline claim. But overall it seems very neutral and encyclopedic!

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
Wow, I'm really impressed that you used 10 different sources! Some of them are fairly recent and the old ones are in context so good job with that. A lot of scholarly sources, too. I think you might've forgotten a citation though for the sentence "In 2003, ... some form of mental illness."

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
Maybe can go through and cut out a few words/parts of sentences. For example, saying "institutions" in "institutions offering forms of care related to mental health" seems a little redundant from a first glance. Under Rural remoteness, "are one of the groups" seems a little redundant. Also I think the phrase "Preventative care remains to an under-focused area" can do without the "to"

Some things for clarification:

What do you mean specifically by "has sought to keep" in the 1st sentence under the Mental health subsection?

Does SP refer to Seguro Popular? It might help to re-mention it in the subsection you are referring to it in.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
This is a really good, well-planned addition! Maybe just go through it one last time to take care of small organizational things.