User:Ambedia/Social emotional development/Izzy.vin Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Ambedia
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Ambedia/Social emotional development

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? "Specific terminology used in Indigenous communities can convey common mental health syndromes recognized by the American Psychiatric Association." I don't understand where this sentence is supposed to go and why it is separated from the general paragraph.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? "In Mexico, efforts to promote emotional pedagogy are challenged by the cultural stigma against mental health" may sound a little bias if you don't further explain why there is a stigma and what form the stigma takes place in. Just an added note, you don't explain how these efforts are challenged, I think that would be important to add as now I am wondering how efforts are challenged
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes

I like that each claim you have is back up by a source, looks great.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? I don't really understand what section you're adding to of this article, or are you adding a new section?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? I am not sure what section this is being added to so I can't say
 * What are the strengths of the content added? Claims are backed by sources, overall neutral with an encyclopedic tone, and I can follow the sentences.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * Please state what section you are adding to or what section you will be adding
 * Not clear if you're adding this sentence, "Specific terminology used in Indigenous communities can convey common mental health syndromes recognized by the American Psychiatric Association." to something else. If you are not adding this sentence to a different section, I don't really understand why you put it separate from your first paragraph.
 * I think it would be important to expand upon what you mean in your first sentence. How are efforts being challenged? Why does this stigma exist in Mexico and to what extent are the ways in which you can clearly see this stigma existing (the forms it takes place in)? If you're going to have that as your first sentence, I think it is important to address these things or else I won't really know, as a reader, why you brought that up.