User:Amcgeesa/Brain fag syndrome/Miahutchinson1233333 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Amcgeesa


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Amcgeesa/Brain_fag_syndrome?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brain fag syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
To start, the lead section in the article has not been updated to reflect the new content Amcgeesa added in the sandbox. The lead created by Amcgeesa contains an introduction sentence, but it does not clearly describe the articles topics or what Brain fag syndrome is (in the lead created by Amcgeesa). Nor does the new lead include a brief description of the article's major sections. The information presented in the new lead is very concise. To improve, Amcegeesa can use some information from the original lead (like the definition) of brain fag syndrome in the new lead. Some sources (citations) can also be found to support the statement, "brain fag is very common in adolescents and young adults."

This article describes historically underrepresented populations/topics brain fag syndrome. I do not believe Amcegeesa added any sources to the article. The content added in Amcegeesa's sandbox is relevant to the topic, but it is just one sentence with no supporting sources. Missing content in Amcegeesa's sandbox is more information about brain fag classification, causes, and treatment. Additionally, from viewing the original article, the same source is used multiple times to create diversity in sources Amcegeesa's can find some new sources for the information presented in the original article.

In Amcegeesa's sandbox, the statements about brain fag appear to be unbiased, but it is underrepresented of African, White, Asian, and more populations because examples are not provided. The content in the original article may have a bias by mentioning many African and non-western countries with brain fag. Which could make readers believe brain fag syndrome is specific to Africans when that may not be true.

All the new content presented in Amcegeesa's sandbox is not backed up by reliable or any sources. The information presented in the sandbox is concise, clear, and easy to read. I also do not see any grammar errors. More information like the original article and new sources needs to be passed. There are no images in the sandbox or the original article. Currently, the information presented in the sandbox does not meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements.